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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
To BelieveHow can I thank you? Our friendship, from the start, has been natural to me like breathing, blinking. Soft when we allow it to be, intense and sharply honest at times. Just the right amount of funny sprinkled about for good measure but for some days now I have lived in a dark place. A place with rooms I know you would recognize because you've lived there, too, before. For these few days I've not been able to be here with you or for you and for that, dear one, I am sorry. I hope that you can understand and trust that I have not departed from you, that I am still here thinking of you and missing you but from these dark rooms, reaching out seems so many blind miles away sometimes impossible and sometimes I forget how to do it. How to know what is real and what just feels real. I want to be able to breathe laugh speak without choking sleep cry for what brings joy sigh for the bittersweet knowledge of love dance within the waltz of the wind feel myself being held and cherished. Trust. I am still here and loving you in my way...in our way and wishing that I could stay with you and cursing that I cannot just yet and praying that you can forgive me. And longing always longing to believe.  Claire |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Clair, that was very intense, and beautiful. Parker |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Claire, no need to worry. A true friend understands. But you know that! Grief does someday become less painful, it just takes alot longer than you think it will...but your friends will still be there. Wonderful poem! Denise |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Claire, What do you mean when you said earlier you could write free verse poems like me? This far surpasses me. There's so many great lines here, it'd be redundant to list them all, because I'd basically be repeating the poem. I wish I were exaggerating. Your talent is staggering, raw, measured, focused, humorous, hopeful and just plain beautiful. Mike |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
I find it difficult to respond to poetry such as this. Exceptionally written as always. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I believe, that you just wrote a 'hug'. Back at you, luv, multiplied... |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I screwed up. I meant "What do you mean you said you wished you could write freeverse poems like me." Argh, I'm going to bed. M. |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
I must agree with the others here Claire ... you are without a doubt, one of the best writers I have ever read ... I don't say this to cause your head to swell ... or to hurt anyones feelings ... there are other exceptional writers here as well ... My prayers go up for your speedy recovery Rex}<{{{{o> |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Claire This was an amazing poem! Breathtaking, poingnant, honest, a great poem on all accounts. This is the fist poem of yours I have read. I look forward to reading more! ~Amy~  ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Oh, this almost got me in tears. What a special poem...so very beautiful. Oh, to be loved like that... Pure magic, Claire. Michael |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Claire~ Poignantly lovely. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
A joy to read this beautiful poem. James |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Claire...this is absolutely beautiful. This person is very lucky to have you |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Absolutely beautiful!!! |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Meadowmuse~ this is really wonderful. -SEA |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Parker...thank you for seeing beauty in this. Denise...yes, grief reverberates into every crevice of one's life, and takes its time about receding, but is a natural process, to be sure. Thank you, Denise, for your encouraging words...and for reading. Mike (bsq)...what's staggering is your lavish praise...knock it off! (but thanks) What I meant about your freeverse style is how you write in what comes across to the reader as stream of consciousness...and for your reader, it's as if one is inside, thinking and feeling and looking out of you. I admire your ability to bring me into you. Mike...thank you for reading and for responding...is it the personal nature of the piece that makes it difficult? I appreciate your response, but no need to ever feel obligated to respond to my posts, you know? Serenity...hugs back, and thank you. Rex...yes, MANY exceptional writers! Thank you, Rex, for everything. Aimster...thank you for reading, and welcome...I look forward also to reading your work. Michael...your sweet response was magic to me. Thank you. Marge...thanks so much for reading, Marge. I'm glad you liked this. James...and to read of your reaction to it, also a joy. Thank you, James. Hoot Owl...I am the lucky one, I think. Thank you, Ruth, for your warm words. Suthern...Thanks so much, for reading and letting me know what you think. SEA...I'm glad you enjoyed reading it, thank you! Many thanks to all...Your responses have me a wee bit overwhelmed today. You are a treasure, each. Claire |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
this is precious, such a beautiful look into you, and your heart...really well done! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I admire your poetry Claire and your ability to paint a picture that shows what's in your heart with such clear vibrancy. Wonderful to read! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
"And longing always longing to believe." Claire, this is exqusite, you have a special gift in the way your write...very beautiful... thank you for your sweet note to me...and for the inspiration. take care, janet marie ...there are places inside all our souls... that have never been touched... there are places inside our hearts... that need to be loved this much... Janet Marie *I miss you baby... I love you, always.* |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Corazon...thank you for looking in. Martie...you say the nicest things...thank you, Martie, I'm glad you liked this. Janet Marie...thank you, for everything. Take care of you... Claire |
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