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Confusion

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G. A. Webb
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0 posted 02-24-2000 10:19 AM       View Profile for G. A. Webb   Email G. A. Webb   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for G. A. Webb

What strange force or twist of fate
Would give me the power to contemplate
Visions of love and feelings of hate
Please tell me now before it's too late

What are these words trying to say
What is the meaning that they convey
They appear in my mind every single day
And never cease to blow me away

I'm writing weary and so tired
And find myself so uninspired
Without the woman that I admired
Nor the love that I desired

I sit here bewildered and in confusion
Could this all be just some sick delusion
Or is this whole world a brilliant illusion
You be the judge I say in conclusion

G. A. Webb


 Regret not that which you have done,
Rather that which you haven't

© Copyright 2000 G. A. Webb - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
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1 posted 02-24-2000 10:29 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

GA this is excellent..great rhyme flow, and a moving emotional expression. I really like this one.
take care, janet marie

 ...there are places inside all our souls...
that have never been touched...
there are places inside our hearts...
that need to be loved this much...
Janet Marie

*I miss you baby...
I love you, always.*

G. A. Webb
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2 posted 02-24-2000 09:03 PM       View Profile for G. A. Webb   Email G. A. Webb   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for G. A. Webb

Thank you Janet! I'm glad you liked it, that means a lot to me.  

G

 Regret not that which you have done,
Rather that which you haven't

serenity blaze
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3 posted 02-24-2000 09:43 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Nice, nice work.  Conveyed the weariness
of sometimes thinking too much...Smiling, while I wipe away a tear...close to home.
An echo of my thoughts.
Denise
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4 posted 02-24-2000 11:32 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Touching poem, GA!

Denise
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GA~ this is wonderful! -SEA
Meadowmuse
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I like this too...not just for its inherent rhyme/rhythm perfection, which is flawless, but for the questioning element, the handing over the finding task to the reader.

Claire
G. A. Webb
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7 posted 02-27-2000 11:37 AM       View Profile for G. A. Webb   Email G. A. Webb   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for G. A. Webb

WOW, and just when I thought nobody was going to like this one. THANKS!   I wrote this a while ago when I first started writing. I thought I was starting to loose my mind because these thought just started coming out of me and I didn't know what to make of them. I know now that I have lost my mind and I chronicle that fact by writing every thing down that comes to mind. Thanks you all, I'm glad you liked it.  

G

 Regret not that which you have done,
Rather that which you haven't

Aimster
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~G.A.~

This is simply a wonderful piece of work! I loved the flow of the words as well as the rhyming....in a word rhyming perfection. I also especially liked the last line..."You be the judge" where you give the last of your thoughts to the reader for them to interpret...very nice touch!

~Amy  

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~
 
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