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G. A. Webb Member
since 2000-01-21
Posts 441Stanton, California, USA |
What strange force or twist of fate Would give me the power to contemplate Visions of love and feelings of hate Please tell me now before it's too late What are these words trying to say What is the meaning that they convey They appear in my mind every single day And never cease to blow me away I'm writing weary and so tired And find myself so uninspired Without the woman that I admired Nor the love that I desired I sit here bewildered and in confusion Could this all be just some sick delusion Or is this whole world a brilliant illusion You be the judge I say in conclusion G. A. Webb Regret not that which you have done, Rather that which you haven't |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
GA this is excellent..great rhyme flow, and a moving emotional expression. I really like this one. take care, janet marie ...there are places inside all our souls... that have never been touched... there are places inside our hearts... that need to be loved this much... Janet Marie *I miss you baby... I love you, always.* |
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G. A. Webb Member
since 2000-01-21
Posts 441Stanton, California, USA |
Thank you Janet! I'm glad you liked it, that means a lot to me.  G Regret not that which you have done, Rather that which you haven't |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Nice, nice work. Conveyed the weariness of sometimes thinking too much...Smiling, while I wipe away a tear...close to home. An echo of my thoughts. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Touching poem, GA! Denise |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
GA~ this is wonderful! -SEA |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
I like this too...not just for its inherent rhyme/rhythm perfection, which is flawless, but for the questioning element, the handing over the finding task to the reader. Claire |
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G. A. Webb Member
since 2000-01-21
Posts 441Stanton, California, USA |
WOW, and just when I thought nobody was going to like this one. THANKS! I wrote this a while ago when I first started writing. I thought I was starting to loose my mind because these thought just started coming out of me and I didn't know what to make of them. I know now that I have lost my mind and I chronicle that fact by writing every thing down that comes to mind. Thanks you all, I'm glad you liked it. G Regret not that which you have done, Rather that which you haven't |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
~G.A.~ This is simply a wonderful piece of work! I loved the flow of the words as well as the rhyming....in a word rhyming perfection. I also especially liked the last line..."You be the judge" where you give the last of your thoughts to the reader for them to interpret...very nice touch! ~Amy  ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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