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As there are stars and storms

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Severn
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0 posted 02-23-2000 09:37 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Severn


We question heaven
and I see
your flashing
want of the kiss
I hold and struck I wonder

are endings but
a turning to the new unknown


You shake the still places
of my loss
held quiet
and unfurled
I am before you

and ever are there places
we walk undying


We catch the dark of
unlit stars our
breath too
softly slow to
miss the path of inhalation

and always I seek for air
I need not breathe


The crush of you peeks
through my safety
that kiss
my eyes have
hid is quickly stolen

and so I storm the sky
with search of peace


Your trust lifts from me
the presence of
my defense
silent arms louder
than a whisper of denial

and I question heaven and
call the moving clouds to answer



 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath
© Copyright 2000 Kamla Mahony - All Rights Reserved
Martie
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1 posted 02-23-2000 10:17 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Kamla, I can only begin to say how amazing I think you are.  I must read this again.
Corinne
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2 posted 02-23-2000 10:32 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

I have to agree with Martie, you are very talented my friend!

Corinne
Michael
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3 posted 02-24-2000 12:59 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Beautiful, girl.  When I grow up I wanna write just like you.  

"and ever are there places
we walk undying",

Indeed, Severn.  Indeed.


Michael

mirjam
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4 posted 02-24-2000 01:01 AM       View Profile for mirjam   Email mirjam   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mirjam

You shake the still places of my loss
held quiet and unfurled i am before you...
Man Kamla i have read this 3 times now and every time i read it the lines swirl around my heart, it is your way with words that stirs up such a passion for poetry - what an amazing poem - so full of longing, and question, and frustration, and i dont know... your writing always brings out a SENSE, and sometimes i just can't put my finger on what it is exactly. Keep calling Kamla, the one who made those moving clouds WILL answer.  Bless you my dear friend.
Beki
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5 posted 02-24-2000 01:44 AM       View Profile for Beki   Email Beki   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Beki

I have read this about 6 times now and every time it sounds better and better. I tried to pick favorite lines but I love them all. This poem has the freshest imagery I have read in a long long time...

Lord, Severn, this is OUTSTANDING! Extraordinary even...makes me say "DAMN! I Wish I'd written that!"

I will look forward to reading more of your work  
Eloise
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6 posted 02-24-2000 01:51 AM       View Profile for Eloise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Eloise

Excellent as always Kamla.  I'm glad you're back and posting.  Will look forward to more.  
serenity blaze
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7 posted 02-24-2000 03:20 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Deep, deeper, deepest...

"And always I seek for air
  I need not breathe--"

Sums it up for me in a cosmic heart-beat.
Beautiful, thank you.  
Marge Tindal
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8 posted 02-24-2000 03:26 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Kamla~
Enchanting and lovely are your thoughts.
Big sighs of contentment over this one.

What a talent for sending soft flowing
streams meandering through my mind.
Love ya' gal ...
Thanks for the e-mails.  I LOVE 'EM.
~*Marge*~



 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Dark Angel
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9 posted 02-24-2000 05:29 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Kamla,  *sighhhhhh* I'm in awe of your talent sweet butterfly. This is breathtaking, extremely beautiful, I loved every single line, from the beginning to the end!!
Excellent work as always!!!
*hugs* my dear friend.  

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


suthern
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on the threshold of a dream


10 posted 02-24-2000 12:09 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Absolutely beautiful, Severn... Like Beki, I'm unable to pick a favorite phrase... all are excellent!
Balladeer
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11 posted 02-24-2000 04:38 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Some day, sweet girl, you're gonna have to tell me how you can make something so beautiful look so easy. You are amazing, my deer.
vandana
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12 posted 02-24-2000 06:31 PM       View Profile for vandana   Email vandana   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for vandana

Nice poem.Liked this much
Elizabeth Santos
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13 posted 02-24-2000 06:47 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Kamla
I wonder if your years will ever catch up to your talent. I doubt it. The Talent has too great a headstart.
Amazing, dear
Love ya
Liz
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14 posted 02-24-2000 10:05 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

Severn. . .

You always have a way of making me think. . . and this time is no different. . . these words are so profound, they make me want to discuss the nature of life and the cosmos with you. . . for I am sure that we have the same ideas. . .

Wonderful words my friend. . .

---------------------------------------------

 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

Alwye
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In the space between moments


15 posted 02-24-2000 11:10 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Wow....incredible work.  You speak with a wisdom that few possess.  Stunning piece, Severn.  

 *Krista Knutson*

"Every moment marked with apparitions of your soul...." ~*Sarah McLachlan- Do What You Have To Do*~

Denise
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16 posted 02-25-2000 10:26 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Beautiful, as always, Severn!  

Denise
Severn
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17 posted 02-25-2000 08:21 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Martie - wow - a re-read! Thanks hon, that is a compliment and that you think I am amazing is also a BIG one...and humbling. Kisses.

Corinne - why thankyou - and the same sure goes!

Michael - hehehe! I, like you it seems, most definitely have a Peter Pan complex - I ain't never growing up! Thanks my friend.

Mirjam - more re-reads! Wow! Hey girl - your replies just boost my feeling of belief in myself - thankyou - now would just go be a misionary or something please?

Beki - WOW! MORE re-reads...I am now officially floating...thankyou, thankyou - wow.  

Eloise - I'm glad to be back and thanks for replying as I know you have such trouble with your computer.  

Serenity - 'cosmic heartbeat' - wow, that's a nice way of seeing it! Thanks!

Marge(y) - hey, well, I just love YOU. OK? Going to argue?? LOL. Thankyou dear friend - lets meander together down some streams, a nice break from the world.

Soul sis - hugs back. And thankYOU - see you soon...hehehe

Suthern - thanks! That is a lovely thing to say!

'deer - The Severny One sagely says a simple satisfied shanks.  

Vandana - so nice to hear from you - thankyou.  

Lizzy - only you could say something like that and my friend that is so amazing to me to know you think that - wow!! Thanks dear.

Sven - Perhaps we do. Thankyou!  

Alwye - thanks hon - many say the same of you!

Denise - glad you could make it! Hugs.   and thanks



hoot_owl_rn
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18 posted 02-25-2000 08:24 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Kamla...absolutely beautiful  
Poertree
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19 posted 02-27-2000 10:26 AM       View Profile for Poertree   Email Poertree   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poertree

K

There are so many memorable lines in this I hardly know where to start .. so I won't.  I'll just say that I read it first a few days ago and even now I'm still finding new angles .. this is a truly good poem Kamla .. so good it's off the freezing scale ..  lol

P
Grandma Jo
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20 posted 02-27-2000 07:22 PM       View Profile for Grandma Jo   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Grandma Jo

You are GOOD! I just loved this. I have put a copy on my message board in my kitchen. Hope you don't mind.  

 "Words are an extention of the soul... and poetry the most beautiful form of those words!"
Severn
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21 posted 02-29-2000 03:31 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Ruth - why thankyou my friend.

Sir P - from you that is an immense compliment - thankyou. Humbly curtsying.

Grandma Jo - I mainly brought this up again to say a special thankyou - that really means a lot, and of course I don't mind - I am quite honoured. Thanks.  

K
Poertree
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22 posted 02-29-2000 08:17 AM       View Profile for Poertree   Email Poertree   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poertree

Grrrrrrr quit the "Sir" or I'll side with BD and relocate you ....  

P
Seymour Tabin
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23 posted 02-29-2000 08:49 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Amazing my dear, *L*
HelmutB
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24 posted 02-29-2000 08:53 PM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

Beautiful Severn, just that

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

 
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