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The Mountain (Inspired by Lost Dreamer)

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Michael
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0 posted 02-23-2000 08:31 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Michael

THE MOUNTAIN


Here I am
miles away
from everything
So very far
from anything

From where I stand
I look back
the path behind me
perilous
precarious
unascertainable

Yet, I look out
there she is
the world
surrounding me
A million
perhaps a billion
faces
scurrying about
grabbing
reaching
fighting for position
on a plane
of reality
I cannot
consciously
fathom

What gains
could possibly motivate them
power
greed
lust
what has been purchased
material
that can be held
eternally
who will pay the final
price

I turn from the faces
faces of screaming souls
of half smirk smiles
faces of calculative eyes
weighing love by
inches
and decimal points
faces of helpless anger
hopeless frustration
broken trust
forgotten truths
faces of those
I thought
I knew

Those who
endeavored to climb
next me
to look upon me
to touch me
Those whose eyes
shined on
but never in reflection
of mine
those who chose to let go
now fallen
unto the
sea of faces
below

I look up
one ledge to go
This mountain
this conglomeration
of jagged stone
of unforgiving
self
now nearly beneath me

One ledge
between
me and freedom
One ledge between
me and truth

Blood slickened palms
calloused fingers
I grasp her
Every ounce of endurance
utilized
I pull myself up
but I can't

I dangle in mid air
strength reeling
fingers slipping
Nails digging in deep
Man verses mountain
I scream of
agony
of pain
I scream
of
forever

One ledge
to kill me
to heal me
to save me from
the faces below

One

The sun shines on my face
gentle winds
breathe

Finally
I rest
The
struggle
over

I have
taken
her

She is
mine

Michael Anderson


It's true, Love lasts forever
Only her memory slips away.



[This message has been edited by Michael (edited 02-23-2000).]
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Lost Dreamer
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1 posted 02-23-2000 08:42 PM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lost Dreamer

Michael, I feel honored that I inspired a masterpiece of this caliber, This was just intense, you made me feel the fear of you slipping off that mountain, and then the joy of capturing it. One day your name will grace the bookstores.
Janet Marie
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2 posted 02-23-2000 08:55 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

"Those who
endeavored to climb
next me
to look upon me
to touch me
Those who eyes
shined on
but never in reflection
of mine
those who chose to let go
now fallen
unto the
sea of faces
below"...

damn michael...enough said( a mere mortal's words pale next to yours anyway.)(smile)
janet marie

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3 posted 02-23-2000 09:13 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

This has to shoot straight to the top of the list as your best by far! This was whoa, FANTASTIC!!!

Michael and excellent piece of work! Submit, submit, submit!


 <*\\\><

There's only two ways you can go...
One way you can save your riches,
And the other will save your soul.
Rich Mullins
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4 posted 02-23-2000 09:14 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

So utterly intense!
Well done - good to see you keep venturing into freeverse too - it suits you!

 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath
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5 posted 02-23-2000 09:17 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Nothing can be said other than your talent is larger than that mountain....Put your manuscript together Michael...do it now...
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6 posted 02-24-2000 12:43 AM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

Michael, your talent shines brightly even in your dark moments. It wasn't wide but it sure was deep. Keep writing as fast as you can, just don't let yourself go over the edge.

Parker...

though every day has a setting sun,
every night a billion more will come.


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7 posted 02-24-2000 01:02 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

Love lasts forever, only her memory slips away....God Michael...all I can say is that you've stolen my breathe with this magnificent piece!!! I stand in awe m'dear!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
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8 posted 02-24-2000 04:32 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Michael~
Tumultuous trials are challenging.
You've met the challenge.
Be proud of yourself for the 'climb'.
Your flag is planted firmly at the top
of the mountain.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Denise
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9 posted 02-24-2000 12:16 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is fantastic, Michael! WOW!  

Denise
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Lost Dreamer, thanks and I hope you're right about the bookstores.

Janet Marie, I am merely mortal, I assure you...LOL  Thanks for the smile... I sure needed one.

Quite a compliment there WhtDove - I still feel I need a few pointers before I submit anything - especially in the freeverse dept.

Severn, you don't know how hard it was to write without using punctuation - well, maybe you do cause you have seen me struggle to do it in the past..LOL  Thanks for all you words of guidance, you have been a tremenous help to me.

PdV, alright already...I promise I'll submit one soon.

Haleyja, I went over that edge a long time ago...LOL

devina, glad I stole your breath for a change...it's usually the other way around.    

Marge, you know the best part about overcoming adversity of any kind is the quiet confidence that follows.  Just to know you never gave up, it's an irreplaceable feeling.     Besides, look at the friends I've found waiting for me at the top - I couldn't let all of them down, could I?

Denise, thank you.  


Michael


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11 posted 02-25-2000 06:53 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Very intense Michael....with the amount of friends you have here, you'll never have to climb alone though  
Munda
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12 posted 02-25-2000 10:14 AM       View Profile for Munda   Email Munda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Munda's Home Page   View IP for Munda

"One ledge
to kill me
to heal me
to save me from
the faces below"


Feels as if you've been looking into my soul.
Especially these lines. Excellent poem Micheal !


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13 posted 02-25-2000 08:57 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

You've risen to breathtaking poetic altitude...stand tall, Michael, and fill your lungs with sweet victory's fragrance. This is a superb piece of poetry.

Claire
 
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