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Lost Dreamer
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0 posted 02-23-2000 06:13 PM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Lost Dreamer

Divorcing A Friend

Twisted words among cherished friends
we trust
endlessly leaping forward creating
dire mistrust.
Forever treasure this a laughing fool
I was once
never again freely willing to act
as your dunce.
You carelessly washed the walls
with my torn soul
and hopelessly left me sleeping
in a gaping hole.
Curving blind corners drive
your selfish ambitions
leaving you blissfully lost creating
nasty dispositions.

I failed to color in the bold lines
you traced for me
so now my volcanic anger is all
that erupts to see.
I saw in you a beautiful portrait
of a valued friend
yet no longer can my army of feelings
continue to defend.
I traveled through your venomous
destructive journey
thankful now that divorcing a friend
requires no attorney.
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serenity blaze
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1 posted 02-23-2000 07:46 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Divorcing a friend--a painful and distasteful
process, but often necessary.  Let it go awhile, you may yet meet again to go on in a
new direction.  Well said.
Aimster
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2 posted 02-23-2000 07:49 PM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

I found this a very interesting way to express finding out a friend wasnt who or thought you thought they were...Divorcing a friend...I like the way you expressed that in this poem. Very nice!

Amy

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Nurse Crachet
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serenity: Thanks for reading, glad you enjoyed.

aimster: Thanks for reading and enjoying.
WhtDove
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I can really feel the hurt in this one. Maybe because I've been there myself.  I've "divorced" a couple of them in my life. But when they're like that, who need em.

Well done Gloria, I love the way you used those words!


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One way you can save your riches,
And the other will save your soul.
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5 posted 02-24-2000 01:27 AM       View Profile for Sara   Email Sara   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sara

This poem really affects me right now.  I'm right now in the process of "divorcing" a friend and it's so hard.  But this poem will prove to be comforting I think.
Michael
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6 posted 02-24-2000 01:35 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

"I failed to color in the bold lines
you traced for me
so now my volcanic anger is all
that erupts to see."

I can't tell you how hard this phrase hit me.  I know this feeling all to well.  You don't need that shame cast upon you, Gloria, don't accept it.  I know this was written long ago but I speak from experience when I say even if you kept in the lines, they would have changed the picture on you half way through.

Emotion carried beautifully throughout.  Strong piece.


Michael
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Excellent writing, Gloria! I agree with Michael, too. People like that just keep changing the rules to suit themselves. You are much better off without someone like that!

Denise
Elizabeth Santos
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8 posted 02-24-2000 10:51 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Very strong wording. I also like the phrase Michael pointed out about coloring in the bold lines.Interesting poem
Liz
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