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Divorcing A Friend (Revised repost from open 1)
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Divorcing A Friend (Revised repost from open 1) |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow 
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Divorcing A Friend Twisted words among cherished friends we trust endlessly leaping forward creating dire mistrust. Forever treasure this a laughing fool I was once never again freely willing to act as your dunce. You carelessly washed the walls with my torn soul and hopelessly left me sleeping in a gaping hole. Curving blind corners drive your selfish ambitions leaving you blissfully lost creating nasty dispositions. I failed to color in the bold lines you traced for me so now my volcanic anger is all that erupts to see. I saw in you a beautiful portrait of a valued friend yet no longer can my army of feelings continue to defend. I traveled through your venomous destructive journey thankful now that divorcing a friend requires no attorney. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Divorcing a friend--a painful and distasteful process, but often necessary. Let it go awhile, you may yet meet again to go on in a new direction. Well said. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
I found this a very interesting way to express finding out a friend wasnt who or thought you thought they were...Divorcing a friend...I like the way you expressed that in this poem. Very nice! Amy  )  ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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Nurse Crachet Member
since 1999-09-27
Posts 318They know where I am! |
serenity: Thanks for reading, glad you enjoyed. aimster: Thanks for reading and enjoying. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
I can really feel the hurt in this one. Maybe because I've been there myself. I've "divorced" a couple of them in my life. But when they're like that, who need em. Well done Gloria, I love the way you used those words! <*\\\>< There's only two ways you can go... One way you can save your riches, And the other will save your soul. Rich Mullins |
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Sara Junior Member
since 2000-02-24
Posts 27LaCrosse WI, United States |
This poem really affects me right now. I'm right now in the process of "divorcing" a friend and it's so hard. But this poem will prove to be comforting I think. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
"I failed to color in the bold lines you traced for me so now my volcanic anger is all that erupts to see." I can't tell you how hard this phrase hit me. I know this feeling all to well. You don't need that shame cast upon you, Gloria, don't accept it. I know this was written long ago but I speak from experience when I say even if you kept in the lines, they would have changed the picture on you half way through. Emotion carried beautifully throughout. Strong piece. Michael |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Excellent writing, Gloria! I agree with Michael, too. People like that just keep changing the rules to suit themselves. You are much better off without someone like that! Denise |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Very strong wording. I also like the phrase Michael pointed out about coloring in the bold lines.Interesting poem Liz |
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