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The oblique equation
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The oblique equation |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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The oblique equation A pensive probe of pondering scope, Placates a promise of potential hope. Patronizing a problem of evasion, By presenting an oblique equation. A turn about, from a physical form, To a simple convert of mental warm. Balancing the servile delicate scale, For there is no ego that likes to fail. So I say you my friends, scheme your schemes, Delight your minds with your wished for dreams. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
To dream a dream that fills me up that warms my heart as well as cup is too allusive to bring complete for me the real just can't be beat Loved you poem Sy. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie, Your right, but a little dreaming doesn't hurt. *L* |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Cynical but sharp. A reminder for me, I'm afraid. Loved the flow of this...Thanks. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Well I can completely relate to this one Sy - I spend half my life hunched up in my head! LOL! Once again - and excellent piece of writing.  K'Writing sharpens life; life enriches writing' Sylvia Plath |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
A lot to ponder here, my friend, and said so succinctly as well! Corinne |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
perfect poem...(more P's)  now wheres my dictionary...(smile) great work... nice use of your vocab--some words were born to be used in poetry. take care, janet marie ...there are places inside all our souls... that have never been touched... there are places inside our hearts... that need to be loved this much... Janet Marie *I miss you baby... I love you, always.* |
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jbowie Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 135BANGOR (that OR) ME |
I like the play you have put into your words. But I would like more from the ending, as original as the rest of the poem. Great title by the way, J A real man kisses his children goodnight |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
An excellent poem that slipped on past me so silently in the night. From one dreamer to another Love ya Liz |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
A very nice equation Seymour. James |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
My dreams are who I am Sy. . . thank you for letting me have them. . . Excellent words my friend. . . it's so nice to come here whenever I want to now. . . --------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Serenity, thank you for the nice comment. Severn, I know your a dreamer. *L* Corinne, Thank you for the nice words. Janet, Thanks for the read and comment. JBowie, Your right I got lazy, the end could have been better. Elizabeth, Love ya back, Love Sy Jmlee, Nice comment, thank you. Sven, Glad your here, Happy dreams. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
What are we without our dreams?! Great poem, Sy! Denise |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Wonderful work, Sy. I'm with you - life without dreaming would be pretty stagnant. Besides, as my good friend Edgar once told me; "All that we see or seem Is but a dream within a dream" Michael |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Seymour~ Trying hard not to say, 'it's what I've come to expect from you' ... instead I'll interject, you've shot UNDER par for the course with this one. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Seymore...this is a delight for both the tongue and mind |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Denise, thank you for the great. *L* Michael, a wonderful quote, thank you. Marge, Thanks for the under par, would you please sign my card? LOL *L* Hoot, Thank you kindly. *L* |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
This is great Sy, Dreams are wonderful keep dreaming |
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Compgirl Member
since 2000-02-19
Posts 85USA |
I rely on dreams to excape the hussle and bussle of life. What a well written poem.. |
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