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Places that no one ever Touched

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Martie
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0 posted 02-23-2000 04:34 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

(A friend sent me a CD of Lorenza Ponce and I wrote this while listening to her music)


Places that no one ever Touched

If only I could breathe deep enough
to absorb all this sound
that scratches my ears persisting
I open for assimilation  
then floats on wings above me
allusive and yet sure

Tap-taping still against this heart
a sound like time itself
backing angel heat
that has no flame
is cold yet warm
and then you can almost feel the wind
in the heavens zapping around mountain angles
and the soft tinkle and harmony follows
as sure of direction as this minute

It is the sound of life
where humanity dances and looses
itself in the rhapsody
of movement and swaying
and the voice is the instrument
the instrument the voice
playing upon each other like lovers

I want to dance this joy
my feet in perfect points
my hands like butterflies
and think this song comes from
my heart and pleases
all the small and lonely
with listening

I feel this loverís caress
on skin that is slipping
into rhythm as sensual as a sigh
and if I close my eyes I can be magic
and this invisible partner
will tell me secrets
and will show me places
that no one ever touched

© Copyright 2000 Martie Odell-Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
Danny Holloway
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1 posted 02-23-2000 05:13 PM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

Very nice!  I also like to write while listening to music.  Sets the mood if you know what I mean.
Always enjoy reading your poetry!
Danny
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2 posted 02-23-2000 06:03 PM       View Profile for lucky   Email lucky   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lucky

Well Deary

Would you just lie back here on my couch, relax and tell me all about these magical invisible partners. How long have you been like this..? LOL!!!! I like verry much. Sometimes though... I wonder how close I should let another get close to those places.

Much Love from both of us.

 
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3 posted 02-23-2000 06:46 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Martie:...Superb!!!...I'm sitting here smiling cause there's nothing quite like a violin when played so superbly and you're collecting your thoughts..

HUGS

 Ouvrir mon coeur et ‚me
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4 posted 02-23-2000 07:14 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

The first two lines said it all for me--it's
so hard to describe the sensation of music--
but you did.
Elizabeth Santos
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This makes me want to go out and buy the CD. It sounds wonderful. You, Martie are a joy, and so are you, Rainbow
Liz
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6 posted 02-23-2000 07:20 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Martie~
I feel the music
coursing through this rendering.
Superbly done.
~*Marge*~


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Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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Beautiful!  Oh, this sings to me like a song.  Lovely imagery.  Breathtaking feeling.
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I want to dance this joy
my feet in perfect points
my hands like butterflies
and think this song comes from
my heart and pleases
all the small and lonely
with listening


All I need to say is: Do you mind if I print this work of art my friend?

K

 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath
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Very nicely done!
Corazon
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I am a rock and roller...lol...and so have not learned to enjoy that kind of music, but have the new Santana Cd that has some beautiful guitar playing...I turn it up loud in my car and drive...the guitar talks, it soothes...it keeps me company....your poem is beautiful...thank you  

and martie, I saw your comment on my missing you poem...and yep...I knew as soon as I read yours...kindred souls...big hugs lady

[This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 02-24-2000).]
Martie
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Danny--yes, I know what you mean.  Thanks for the enjoy.

Lucky dear--I've always been this way, you can get as close as you want to your own imagination. Much love back to you and R.

RG--thank you for the superb and especially for the hug.

serenity--I'm so glad you think I suceeded with what I was trying.

Liz, to give you joy makes me very happy.  I think you would like this CD.

Marge-- So glad you could feel it.  

Hi Rosemary--thank you so much for reading and for your kind words.

Kamla--For you to want to print this has made my day and of course you can.

Whtdove--thanks for reading

Corazon--I like rock and roll too, and Santana is wonderful.  Thank you so much for the beautiful.  Looking forward to more of yours.  Hugs back


Corinne
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12 posted 02-24-2000 07:27 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Wow!  What an absolutely profound poem about life!  Fantastic!


Corinne
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13 posted 02-24-2000 10:53 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Absolutely beautiful, Martie!!  

Denise
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Truly beautiful..it is indeed hard to describe the sensation, the emotion music brings forth.  You've done a superb job.  This definitely makes me want to hear this music!

 *Krista Knutson*

"Every moment marked with apparitions of your soul...." ~*Sarah McLachlan- Do What You Have To Do*~

 
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