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When All Is Said And Done
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When All Is Said And Done |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
When all Is Said And Done Upon first glance, you were all I ever needed To hold you in my arms Never listening to the warning my heart heeded A silly sucker for your charms A tainted touch that could tease beyond Abyss Soft was the brush of your lying lips That burnt me in fiery flames of the Jezebel’s kiss In darkest of dangers my soul let me slip Secure and soft a heart now harshly hardened To a world that has no sun Walk alone in a frozen garden Where love’s seed grows no more When all is said and done Marina Feb 22/2000 |
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mystery Member
since 2000-02-21
Posts 79 |
nice poem marina. when the frozen garden thaws, a fresh love will bloom, one that will be better than before |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Marina, the more I read it, the deeper messages appear. A very thought provoking poem. James |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Spring will come and more love will grow, just wait and see. Enjoyed your poem! |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Marina, Really liked this poem a lot. I have similar feelings about someone in my personal life, so I can relate to these feelings somewhat. Hope you find someone who is deserving of you. Great poem. Amy  |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
This has such an edge to it! Great work, Marina. 'Writing sharpens life; life enriches writing' Sylvia Plath |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Mystery,Martie,and Severn: Thanks to all of you for your kind words. Amy: Thank-you and thanks for your added comments they were very sweet. I'll let you know when the real "Mr. Right" comes along. Marina |
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jbowie Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 135BANGOR (that OR) ME |
I felt this very strongly. You have a good talent with how you present your emotions. Somewhere there is the person worth a second look. A real man kisses his children goodnight |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Marina~ Very nicely phrased. When the rays of a new love's sun pause to warm the ground wherein the seeds are kept ... hope will push it's curious head to catch the glow. Thus will spring a new love's bloom. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
James: Thank you and I'm sorry I forgot you in my last post. Not that you could be easily forgotten. Jbowie: Thank you very much for your compliment and I hope I find that person soon. Marge: Thank you for such a wonderful poem. |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
This is very thought provoking- this poem!! I love your imagery here Marina...the words are well put, I think we all can relate!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Unharden that wounded heart, allow another to come in for love is a fickle thing never know when will begin Love is always a chance maybe a roll of the dice to give up holds no promise so let it come around twice ______ Really enjoyed your poem! Hope there's sunshine in the northern. Danny |
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jeremyc Junior Member
since 2000-02-21
Posts 18 |
very nice...and sad...i enjoyed it immensely good work |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
devina: Thanks...if you going to verbaly bash an ex, you might as well use good imagery! Danny: Thank you for such a lovely poem. jeremyc: Thank you too. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautifully done, Marina! Denise |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Denise: Thank you |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Marina, I really enjoyed your poem, though bitter. It perfectly encapsules (is that even a word?) the pain and anger and regret and lost longing of a dead relationship, cracked love in little broken pieces all over the place. What I learned is the way to happiness is finding yourself -- if you prop yourself against anyone, you'll slip sometime. I hope things work out for you, and thanks for posting. Mike |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Mike: Thank you for your kind words. Yes things did work out...I dump him. The best thing I ever did! Marina |
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