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When All Is Said And Done

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Marina
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0 posted 02-23-2000 03:27 PM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Marina




When all Is Said And Done


Upon first glance, you were all I ever needed
To hold you in my arms
Never listening to the warning my heart heeded
A silly sucker for your charms


A tainted touch that could tease beyond Abyss
Soft was the brush of your lying lips
That burnt me in fiery flames of the Jezebelís kiss
In darkest of dangers my soul let me slip


Secure and soft a heart now harshly hardened
To a world that has no sun
Walk alone in a frozen garden
Where loveís seed grows no more
When all is said and done

Marina Feb 22/2000


© Copyright 2000 Marina Crossley - All Rights Reserved
mystery
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1 posted 02-23-2000 03:43 PM       View Profile for mystery   Email mystery   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mystery

nice poem marina.
when the frozen garden thaws, a fresh love will bloom, one that will be better than before
Parker
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2 posted 02-23-2000 03:59 PM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

Marina, the more I read it, the deeper messages appear. A very thought provoking poem.

James
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Spring will come and more love will grow, just wait and see.  Enjoyed your poem!
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4 posted 02-23-2000 06:14 PM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

Marina,

Really liked this poem a lot. I have similar feelings about someone in my personal life, so I can relate to these feelings somewhat. Hope you find someone who is deserving of you. Great poem.

Amy
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5 posted 02-23-2000 09:09 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

This has such an edge to it! Great work, Marina.

 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
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Marina
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6 posted 02-23-2000 11:55 PM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marina

Mystery,Martie,and Severn:  Thanks to all of you for your kind words.

Amy: Thank-you and thanks for your added comments they were very sweet.  I'll let you know when the real "Mr. Right" comes along.

Marina
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I felt this very strongly. You have a good talent with how you present your emotions. Somewhere there is the person worth a second look.

 A real man
kisses his children goodnight
Marge Tindal
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8 posted 02-24-2000 04:49 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Marina~
Very nicely phrased.

When the rays of a new love's sun
pause to warm the ground wherein
the seeds are kept ...
hope will push it's curious head
to catch the glow.
Thus will spring a new love's bloom.

~*Marge*~


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Marina
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9 posted 02-24-2000 01:08 PM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marina

James: Thank you and I'm sorry I forgot you in my last post.  Not that you could be easily forgotten.

Jbowie:  Thank you very much for your compliment and I hope I find that person soon.

Marge: Thank you for such a wonderful poem.

devina
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This is very thought provoking- this poem!! I love your imagery here Marina...the words are well put, I think we all can relate!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
Danny Holloway
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11 posted 02-24-2000 01:50 PM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

Unharden that wounded heart,
allow another to come in
for love is a fickle thing
never know when will begin

Love is always a chance
maybe a roll of the dice
to give up holds no promise
so let it come around twice
______
Really enjoyed your poem! Hope there's sunshine in the northern.
Danny


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12 posted 02-24-2000 03:52 PM       View Profile for jeremyc   Email jeremyc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jeremyc

very nice...and sad...i enjoyed it immensely  good work
Marina
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13 posted 02-24-2000 06:36 PM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marina

devina: Thanks...if you going to verbaly bash an ex, you might as well use good imagery!

Danny: Thank you for such a lovely poem.

jeremyc: Thank you too.
Denise
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Beautifully done, Marina!  

Denise
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Denise: Thank you
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Marina,
I really enjoyed your poem, though bitter. It perfectly encapsules (is that even a word?) the pain and anger and regret and lost longing of a dead relationship, cracked love in little broken pieces all over the place. What I learned is the way to happiness is finding yourself -- if you prop yourself against anyone, you'll slip sometime. I hope things work out for you, and thanks for posting.

Mike
Marina
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17 posted 02-25-2000 11:59 AM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marina

Mike: Thank you for your kind words.  Yes things did work out...I dump him.  The best thing I ever did!

Marina
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