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serenity blaze
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0 posted 02-23-2000 01:51 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for serenity blaze

      
Take my hand,
you'll be surprised
how easy it is
with nothing to hide.

Come walk with me.
We'll share some wine.
Remember truth--
forget old times--
when we were strangers to each other.

Let's find out if we are...
wishes land on falling stars...
Heaven can't be very far
when God's so very close.

So talk to me.
You make me smile.
Listen to the wind awhile.

Take my hand.
You'll be surprised.
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Serenity~ wonderfully romantic! -SEA
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2 posted 02-23-2000 02:12 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Sure sounds like "serenity" to me.  Beautiful and warming words.

Michael
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Serenity~
Now, this is beautiful.
I enjoy the way you traipse through
this 'walk'.
~*Marge*~


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serenity blaze
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4 posted 02-23-2000 06:40 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

I was hoping this one would just slide off
the page...it is trite, and I know it.  But
thanks to you Sea, Michael, and of course,
dear 'mom', as always for the encouragement.
Severn
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5 posted 02-23-2000 09:04 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

You may see this as trite - but I think it is dreamy and just lovely.



 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath
Martie
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Yes, it is lovely--very lovely.
devina
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7 posted 02-24-2000 01:08 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

Awe!! This one is sweet hun...I love the way each word caressed the page!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
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8 posted 02-24-2000 01:39 AM       View Profile for Rex Allen McCoy   Email Rex Allen McCoy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rex Allen McCoy's Home Page   View IP for Rex Allen McCoy

I find nothing trite about this poem ... It reads just right ... with a touch of class
and a pinch of romance ... makes one want to reach out

Rex}<{{{{o>
Eloise
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serenity, I have to agree with Kamla (Severn).  I enjoyed this very much.  
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10 posted 02-24-2000 09:45 AM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

~Serenity

I didn't find this poem to be trite in the least bit. I found it to be a bit of fresh air after a already rough morning! Very poetic, very romantic. Two thumbs up.

~Amy~
 
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