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You'll Be Surprised |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Take my hand, you'll be surprised how easy it is with nothing to hide. Come walk with me. We'll share some wine. Remember truth-- forget old times-- when we were strangers to each other. Let's find out if we are... wishes land on falling stars... Heaven can't be very far when God's so very close. So talk to me. You make me smile. Listen to the wind awhile. Take my hand. You'll be surprised. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Serenity~ wonderfully romantic!  -SEA |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Sure sounds like "serenity" to me. Beautiful and warming words. Michael |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Serenity~ Now, this is beautiful. I enjoy the way you traipse through this 'walk'. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I was hoping this one would just slide off the page...it is trite, and I know it. But thanks to you Sea, Michael, and of course, dear 'mom', as always for the encouragement. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
You may see this as trite - but I think it is dreamy and just lovely. 'Writing sharpens life; life enriches writing' Sylvia Plath |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Yes, it is lovely--very lovely. |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Awe!! This one is sweet hun...I love the way each word caressed the page!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
I find nothing trite about this poem ... It reads just right ... with a touch of class and a pinch of romance ... makes one want to reach out Rex}<{{{{o> |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
serenity, I have to agree with Kamla (Severn). I enjoyed this very much. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
~Serenity I didn't find this poem to be trite in the least bit. I found it to be a bit of fresh air after a already rough morning! Very poetic, very romantic. Two thumbs up. ~Amy~ |
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