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Broken Ice

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christies heart
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0 posted 02-22-2000 07:11 AM       View Profile for christies heart   Email christies heart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for christies heart

The ice on my windshield
is much like my soul,
determined and strong when new.
Yet tap long enough
on the same solid spot,
and soon you are bound to break through.

For with just the first crack
of this once solid form
pieces break quickly away,
until what was once sturdy
losses its hold,
along with the will to stay.

Soon it is melting,
the ice and my soul,
it crumbles like all broken dreams.
The rock of its being
was a simple mirrage,  
that flows away now in crystalized streams.


 Grant that I may not judge my niegbor until I have walked a mile in his moccasians

Native American prayer



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1 posted 02-22-2000 07:34 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

ChristiesHeart~
I like the image of the
ice cracking ... love sometimes
has to enter through the melting.
~*Marge*~


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An excellent analogy, Christie, and very well delivered...liked this one!

Claire
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Christies Heart~
Your choice of wording in this writing
is simply remarkable.
You have taken a very abstract emotional state
and described in comparrison so perfectly
how a heart can become shielded.
I LOVE THIS ONE!
Great Job.
January Flowers
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...or would that be
"unshielded"?
christies heart
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5 posted 02-22-2000 04:05 PM       View Profile for christies heart   Email christies heart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for christies heart

Marge..thank you for your thoughtful response. You are so right about love breaking through. This poem, though, is written for my sister who is dealing with the conflict that happens when love for another is sometimes not enough..and how a person can wear your self esteem down. This hardness or "wall" is not the defensive kind..its the kind of self love and strength. Sometimes as you say, love has to break through. In this case it would be self love I suppose! : : :

Claire..Thanks for such a nice response and for reading my poem.  

January Flowers...I really appreciate your kind words. As I wrote about the meaning of the poem in my life I did wonder if the heart in someways is becoming shilded in another way by the melting away of its strength.....   

 Grant that I may not judge my niegbor until I have walked a mile in his moccasians

Native American prayer


 
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