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jeremyc
Junior Member
since 2000-02-21
Posts 18


0 posted 2000-02-21 04:31 PM


how, with mere words can one describe your kiss
that which fills my heart with such unmerited bliss
that which as soon as is ended, i miss
that feeling I get when together we press our lips
with your hands on my shoulders and mind on your hips
...
...
oh, i give up, a poem can do it no justice
but do you think, for at least trying to write you this
that when next we meet, i can feel your sweet kiss?


hi everyone...tell me what you think...i wrote this today after taking my biology test...thanx in advance..ps, this was written for my girlfriend, but i haven't given it to her yet..

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Cerenity
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since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637
Escondido-California
1 posted 2000-02-21 04:52 PM


Hi jeremyc,

That poem was so great and I think you should give it to her, she will more than likely love it.

WELCOME TO PASSIONS

Cerenity-1

devina
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since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539
Cali
2 posted 2000-02-21 06:02 PM


Welcome Jeremy...So glad to see that you're in love...we need more love floating around in here!!! Anything that's written with such feeling...will mean the most to the one you love...in other words- GIVE IT TO HER!!! hehe

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

jeremyc
Junior Member
since 2000-02-21
Posts 18

3 posted 2000-02-21 06:13 PM


thanx everyone...actually this isn't really my first post (although close to it)...i just got a new "handle"...but i never got welcome before, so thank you  )  any other comments?
Severn
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since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

4 posted 2000-02-21 06:44 PM


Well you can have a welcome now from me: Welcome!

I'm sure your girlfriend will just love this (and probably won't mind obliging either!)

K

 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath

Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
5 posted 2000-02-21 06:53 PM


Welcome to Passions (again!). Please check your email!  
jeremyc
Junior Member
since 2000-02-21
Posts 18

6 posted 2000-02-21 07:07 PM


hey, poet devine, thanx a lot...that was really nice of you..and thank you all for the welcome...you'll probably be seeing a bit more of me, so get used to it..  )
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