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Cerenity
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since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637
Escondido-California

0 posted 2000-02-21 04:00 PM


I will stand back and love
you from afar, you choose it
to be that way. My nearness to
you brings pangs of distress
and calamity in my thoughts.

Our movement as one in union
has become sluggish and rare.
We must at this time maintain
and co-exist in the same footage
but apart in our routines.

I have fought to bring us
together to dance life's games
but you tug and pull at the
ropes so as to maintain your own
ground of existance.

You show no invitation for me
to come in, and no ground rules
do you lay.There is no convenance
of your thoughts of any form.

I have no control over your
capacities nor do you of mine,but
in sharing we could walk as one soul
striving for the same mark together.

No one should put limits on the
affections of another,there are limits
that can be reached were love cannot
sustain its forgiving forse.

I hope that you do not cross over
that threshold into nothingness. It
has to be a union of two and the
desire to conquer to become one.


By, Cerenity


© Copyright 2000 Ellen Ware - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

1 posted 2000-02-21 04:05 PM


wow..this is excellent...well expressed emotions...
"No one should put limits on the
affections of another,there are limits
that can be reached were love cannot
sustain its forgiving forse.

I hope that you do not cross over
that threshold into nothingness. It
has to be a union of two and the
desire to conquer to become one."...

really well written...perfect ending.
take care, janet marie



 I love you
Is all that you can't say-
Years gone by and still...
Words don't come easily
Like I love you, I love you...
But you can say baby...
Baby can I hold you tonight
Maybe if I told you the right words
At the right time you'd be mine...
Tracy Chapman



mystery
Member
since 2000-02-21
Posts 79

2 posted 2000-02-21 04:08 PM


This a poem that I think many of us can relate to.
I have actually been in this position where I have tried and tried to make a union, but the other person just stubborn, In my own experiences I have learned that you cannot make people do what you want them to, maybe they arent ready for the commitment, and maybe they will never be ready for the commitment. I will say this, don't wait around forever for people like this because they will end up hurting you bad. If things aren't progressing, your best bet is to move on.

Danny Holloway
Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK
3 posted 2000-03-03 11:35 AM


"Noone should put limits on the affections of another". This was a really good line.
Missed reading this when first posted. So,
I now kick it to the top because it's so good.

Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

4 posted 2000-03-03 12:29 PM


This is wonderful, Cerenity! Very well expressed!!

Denise

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
5 posted 2000-03-03 04:01 PM


I like the way you have expressed yourself in this one  
JamesMichael
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
6 posted 2000-03-03 04:28 PM


Beautiful thoughts here and I hope for the best for you.  May the beauty of love embrace your love and help you find your special love.    James
Cerenity
Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637
Escondido-California
7 posted 2000-03-03 11:57 PM


Hi every one, WOW, WOW again,

Where were all of you special souls during the times in my life that I have walked alone. I have to say something, yes at some time in my life each poem I have written has had a reason behind it, but I have to say I'm not going throught most of the stuff I post at this time, But I love all of your thoughts. Yes my life is something but sence I have been reading as many post as I can My mind has never been so peaceful.


Thank you so much, Cerenity

Elizabeth Santos
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269
Pennsylvania
8 posted 2000-03-04 07:03 AM


There is much truth in this poem. And you express it so well and so openly. I feel that if one rejects the notion of being together, it is meant to be that way. And sometimes the heart recognizes love that the spirit doesn't (only personal belief). I could go on about this subject, but no one would agree or be interested. But I like this poem and the depth of it. Excellent.
Liz

INclan
Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024
Indiana, USA
9 posted 2000-03-04 07:20 AM


Well Said!

I have read and re-read your poem several times while considering how to respond. From 18 years of marriage, I don't see the effect as hate, rejection, or limitations. Rather, I experience the dilema as cold indifference. I think I could deal much better with either passionate love or passionate hate. Indifference is indeed a vacuum of perpetual frustration.

INclan

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