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Wine and roses

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Seymour Tabin
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          Wine and roses

Sitting quiet, plucking whimsy,
From a daisy soft and flimsy,
Watching sparrowing shadows spew,
My mind did conjure up a coup.

I would send an invitation.
Full of dares imagination.
A moonlit tete-a-tete for two.
With roses and champagne of brew.

Surrounding a small pagoda.
One fumed with exotic odor.
An aggregate, an omnibus.
Were we would be alone, just us.

And I would shape the world anew.
Whispered in a mellow coo.
Touch you with raptures traces,
Hold you in my strong embraces.

And we would ship on Noahs Ark,
To Edenville, then disembark.

© Copyright 2000 Seymour Tabin - All Rights Reserved
Betty Gravitt
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1 posted 02-21-2000 12:33 PM       View Profile for Betty Gravitt   Email Betty Gravitt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Betty Gravitt

"And I would shape the world anew."
"Hold you in my strong embraces."

Then a trip to Edenville, what more could a person want in this world? I like the poem, but this ending is my favorite, because it's not and ending. It's a promise of a new begining. I like this idea.

 B Gravitt



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January Flowers
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2 posted 02-21-2000 12:42 PM       View Profile for January Flowers   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for January Flowers

So when is it that I can expect my invitation?
You make it sound like such a pleasant date!
Love the soothing flow of this one.
Seymour Tabin
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Betty, Yes it's an ending without an end. Thank you Betty.

January, Thank you January, you read like allot of fun. Enjoyed your answer.
Elizabeth Santos
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4 posted 02-21-2000 05:08 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Sy,
A sensual poem , every part
From tete a tete to disembark
Your words have touched an acute sensation
Surpassing all imagination
Love ya,
Liz  
Severn
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5 posted 02-21-2000 05:16 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Just too beautiful Sy.

One of the ones which produces a sound very much like the sound of your name!

K

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life enriches writing'
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Excellent writing, Sy...but wouldn't it smell a little on that Ark? I mean, all the animals and all, two by two, shuffling around...big eleph......uh, excellent writing, Sy  
Martie
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Lovely Sy, this date you've planned
if you want music, I'll be the band.
As far as the ark I have to say
I'd rather play beside the bay.

Great poem Sy!
Seymour Tabin
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Elizabeth, Your comments are more beautiful than my poems. Love Sy

Severn, You are sweet, thank you and *L*

Balladeer, I was thinking more along the lines of a pagoda for two. Thanks

Martie, Love your comments, they almost always give me a chuckle. *L*
Meadowmuse
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9 posted 02-21-2000 10:14 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Beautiful and lovingly sentimental writing, Seymour.
Denise
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Very romantic, Sy! *sigh*  

Denise
Seymour Tabin
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Meadow, Enjoyed your comment, thank you.

Denise, Thank you for the sigh, Sy *L*
whiskey
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This is very beautiful Sy you are a romantic arent you   much enjoyed
devina
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13 posted 02-22-2000 12:19 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

You've managed to flutter this heart yet again Sy...this was quite the secluded story of romance!!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
Seymour Tabin
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Whiskey, Guilty to the romantic, but glad you enjoyed. *L*

Denise,
But it was a nice flutter. *L* Sy
 
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