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mystery
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since 2000-02-21
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0 posted 2000-02-21 11:36 AM


Actual people inspired me to write this poem, I just picked a color to represent each gentleman.

Choosing love isn't easy
especially when you have a variety of choices
each candidate possesses an unique quality
but only one of these loves could end up with me

Mr. Gray, The most experienced of all my loves/
how I admired your wisdom & maturity/
I love your salt & pepper hair/
but your lack of cheer/
is beginning to make me gloomy/

Handsome Mr. Bown, we were almost one/
how your skin would reflect off the rays of my sun/
how I always knew that our love would work/
but your true colors showed when you treated me like dirt/

Mr. Beige, the sweetest of them all/
many women mistaked your kindness for a weakness/
your sensitives side moves me/
your grayish-brown eyes amuse me/
never afraid to get in touch with your femininity/
I wonder why things didn't work out for you and me/

My purist Mr. White/
how you certainly impassioned me/
I was intensely heated by you at first sight/
until I discovered how weakly colored you were/
out of all of my loves, you lacked something/
respect for all other hues putting yourself on top/
instantly becoming turned off, I had to let this relationship drop/

My everlasting love/
how could I overlook you
when all along you were right in front of me/
I apologize for that/
I love how you can relate to me/
because you have seen hard times, you understand me/
so understand that you've only been disclosed for security purposes/
Mr.Black, I promise not to hurt you
loving me will be prosperous
because unlike others my colors are true



 

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Parker
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since 2000-01-06
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1 posted 2000-02-21 12:18 PM


Hi mystery, nice use of color themes. What's the / used for in your poetry. I'm not familiar with it. It kind of distracting.
Nice to have you here.

Parker

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