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Forever Out ... For Christie's Heart

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Meadowmuse
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Forever Out



I have stared forever out and
toward the lulling, pulling sea.
I have searched within the darkness
of the empty ocean of me.

I have crawled through days unending
with soggy sand in lieu of heart.
Through remaining, hulking ruins
of castle dreams I'd dared to start.

I have turned and walked back slowly
to that helpless stone~still child
whose innocent eyes upon me,
long replaced with something wild,

Had given up on the elderfolk
and fairy angels she would read
to free her from the filthy
knotted nettles of demons' deeds.

Whose far~off gaze would lie
while little arms and knees were muddied
to hide the pain of five year old flesh
being bruised, ripped open and bloodied.

Whose secret prayers and lullabyes
could never so much as be heard,
though that child, always silent,
knew each syllable of every word.

And the sometimes when
she trusts enough to hold her close to me,
are the times I breathe against her
and I feel her feel the sea.

And the sands are dry and warming now
and urging us to start
building castles, true and towering,
along the beaches of our heart.



Dear LadyClaire


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hoot_owl_rn
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Claire...this is beautiful. Any poem about the ocean always strikes a chord with me. Nicely done  
Rex Allen McCoy
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This is beautiful Claire ... you write with such passion ... it takes my breath away and fills my heart with the song of your choosing

Rex}<{{{{o>
Fred Hobbs
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3 posted 02-21-2000 11:24 AM       View Profile for Fred Hobbs   Email Fred Hobbs   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Fred Hobbs's Home Page   View IP for Fred Hobbs

Great poem Claire, I love the imagery and the pace.

fh
Meadowmuse
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4 posted 02-21-2000 04:54 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Hoot Owl...Thank you. I agree...the ocean is a wonderful metaphorical tool for writers, as within its realm can be found the full range of human emotion.

Rex...I'm glad to know your heart is full of music.   Thanks for reading.

Fred...Thank you, Fred, for your thoughtful response. So glad you enjoyed this one.

Claire
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I have came back and read for the third time and suspect I will return again.  
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6 posted 02-21-2000 05:16 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Loud approval here, Claire. This is excellent. What a style you have  
Severn
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7 posted 02-21-2000 06:14 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Stunning - absolutely stunning!!


My favourite verse - though hard to pick, is this:

And the sometimes when
she trusts enough to hold her close to me,
are the times I breathe against her
and I feel her feel the sea.

I know that sense of feeling the ocean running through you.

K

 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath
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My Lady
A dream enchantingly painted, that you do
The Ocean the Sea a dream come true
Your certainly know how to dream in style and art
"along the beaches of our heart."
This line alone so deep the thought
L. & S.P.
((((you))))




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Stunning, Meadowmuse.  I too love poetry written with an ocean theme.  Lovely work, as always.  

 *Krista Knutson*

"Every moment marked with apparitions of your soul...." ~*Sarah McLachlan- Do What You Have To Do*~

Meadowmuse
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Thanks to all who read and responded. I'm grateful that this work touched someone in something of a positive way.

Claire  
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Claire, I do enjoy reading all of your work.  I don't alway have the time to respond, but all of your work is so outstanding.  And this  is another example of excellence  
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Clair, I love it, I love it, I love it.

Parker
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Claire~
Again you've tendered a work of art.
Stunning.
~*Marge*~


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Meadowmuse, This is a powerful and wonderful poem. Thank you so much for sharing that with me in response to my poem. You paint a clear picture and I read this poem several times. Maybe it is my own experiences and the meaning I see in this poem, but I do not feel peace. And I don't get the feeling that peace is the intention. I see the hope and the ever-so-slow growth of a soul who wants to find such peace. This put together so many themes and struggles that really touch me. Thank you so much for sharing. I would like to also share an older post (which I will post agian here) with you. It is called "She Carried Dolls". Again, this poem is inspiring and evokes a variety of feeling...Christie

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Elizabeth Santos
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I read with heartache this poem about sexual abuse, perhaps someone you know. It is a difficult subject, but you write it so beautifully, and I have no doubts that you would.
Liz
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Eloise...Thank you, and please don't worry about not responding to my work. I also read more than I am able to respond to, and I imagine most folks here do the same. There is so much exceptional poetry shared on this board every day, one cannot possibly respond to every piece (and still have a life!). I'm glad you enjoyed this one, Eloise.

Parker...thank you, thank you, thank you!  

Marge...and again, I must thank you for reading. Your words are much appreciated.

Christie...yes, you have interpreted this poem very perceptively. I did not intend for the end to seem like a "happily ever after" by any means. Instead, I wished to show that there is a degree of hope present, but that my healing is, indeed, a long, slow and difficult struggle of self, and something that can only be realized by giving the little one inside time and space to trust. Thank you, so much, for reading this and responding not only here, but with your "She Carried Dolls." I was able to read it earlier this morning, and did respond, but then had to get away for a bit, into the fresh air, to remind myself that what is "now" is not what was "then." Peace in healing to you, Christie, and thank you.

Liz...thank you, and yes, it is about someone I know...myself. I'm glad you were touched by this piece, Liz. Thanks for reading it.

Claire  
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Claire this is an excellent piece of writing. You, too, deal with your emotional pain very well in your writing!    

Denise
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You have reflected on such an uncomfortable and bitter happening with such grace!  I admire the care you are taking with writing on such a powerful subject.  It shows your strength.
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Claire..Just one more thing..before I get back to the now.. I think it says so much of your own strength and healing the way you can are able to speak openly, without any of the so often present, but unthinkable shame that often comes with the start of healing. It shows me you have had a long road behind you and you most certainly are able to live mostly in the present. Very important for me to..  (for the present)
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The first verse took my breath away... I don't have it back yet... this kind of power has "been there" written all over it... wow!
Meadowmuse
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Denise...writing is definitely an important outlet for me. Thank you so much for
your kind response.

Martie...it is a strength that I have fought to attain, and sometimes still have to remind myself that I have. Thank you for reading my work and for such a nice response.

Christie...thank you. Living in the present is a daily challenge for those of us who have spent so much time hiding in the shame and shadows of our past. Some days are better than others, but still we must face forward, if we can. In coming to terms with the horror of the past, you must allow yourself the gentle but firm grasp of a healing hand from within the here and now...your own.
Take care, and face forward...Claire

Suthern...I'm glad you were touched by this, but sorry about your breathing!   Thanks for reading.


Claire



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"Whose secret prayers and lullabyes
could never so much as be heard,
though that child, always silent,
knew each syllable of every word.

And the sometimes when
she trusts enough to hold her close to me,
are the times I breathe against her
and I feel her feel the sea.

And the sands are dry and warming now
and urging us to start
building castles, true and towering,
along the beaches of our heart."

this poem is amazing and deeply touching... I came here today in search of it...due to words of another admirer of it...im sorry i missed it before...I hope you dont mind me bringing it back up...thank you for sharing your wisdom and pain. I respect your courage and honesty. take care, janet marie



 ...there are places inside all our souls...
that have never been touched...
there are places inside our hearts...
that need to be loved this much...
Janet Marie

*I miss you baby...
I love you, always.*

Danny Holloway
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High marks for the poem and the person who wrote it.  I can only echo the praises written above.
Very nice,
Danny
 
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