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I Can't Dive Deep Enough

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Lost Dreamer
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0 posted 02-21-2000 06:02 AM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Lost Dreamer

I Can't Dive Deep Enough

I can't dive
deep enough
to reach you,
I try yet
you retreat
further from
my arms grasp.
I'll save myself
the agony
by standing
on the shore,
hoping one day
you'll need
a breath of air
and see me
from the distance
realizing I do care.

The choice
juggles itself
within your hands,
always seems yourself
is the final stand.
I'm laying here
yet you don't seem
to notice,
oblivious to the love
we once had,
as the love
of escaping reality
controls your mind.
© Copyright 2000 RiaL - All Rights Reserved
sonjes
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1 posted 02-21-2000 07:08 AM       View Profile for sonjes   Email sonjes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sonjes

What can I say about Lost Dreamer's words that has no been said before?  Another great one?  Or perhaps, I feel these words in my soul, have lived these words in my short life, and hope that I will never have to live them again.  It's so very painful to be on the shore.  Wonderful, Lost Dreamer, wonderful.
Lost Dreamer
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2 posted 02-21-2000 07:24 AM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lost Dreamer

sonjes:I don't know what to say, you've thrown me for a loop with your kind compliments.I thank you from the depths of my heart.

[This message has been edited by Lost Dreamer (edited 02-21-2000).]
Michael
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3 posted 02-21-2000 07:24 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

I don't need to tell you that I can completely relate to this one.  great poem Gloria about a very helpless feeling, not being able to reach in to someone's heart, not being able to rekindle the fire that once burned.  Looking into the eyes of someone a million miles away.  Sad, but beautiful.


Michael
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Gloria...wow, can I ever relate here....wonderful poem my friend  
Meadowmuse
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5 posted 02-21-2000 10:56 AM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Well written, though disturbing, and another that I can understand and share in its theme. You've expressed so well what it is to disappear behind someone's "addiction," whatever it may be. Superb sharing of your talents.
Denise
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6 posted 02-21-2000 12:25 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Another beautiful expression from the heart, Gloria! I too can relate to standing on the shore. I think there is always a purpose though.....we may not see it now but someday maybe. Again, great poem!!

Denise
Lost Dreamer
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7 posted 02-21-2000 02:40 PM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lost Dreamer

Michael: Thank You, you really got me with "looking into the eyes of someone a million miles away" That's so much what it seems like.

Ruth: Thank You

Meadowmuse: Thank You

dsnyder: Thank You

Times heals all, and he will be healed by his own power of realization, I will always stand by him, just now I'll be on the shore waiting instead of sinking him deeper.
Balladeer
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8 posted 02-21-2000 05:03 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Good thoughts here, Dreamer....and it's not only important that they come to you, but that they come to you while you still care....
Breathe~
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9 posted 02-21-2000 08:44 PM       View Profile for Breathe~   Email Breathe~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Breathe~

I feel the longing here...

I hope he comes up soon....and finds you still waiting... )

wonderful poem Lost Dreamer...


 I love the time
and in between
the calm inside me
in the space
where I can breathe...

Sarah McLachlan
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10 posted 02-21-2000 11:54 PM       View Profile for One Who Understands   Email One Who Understands   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for One Who Understands

Beautiful poem
Janet Marie
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11 posted 02-21-2000 11:56 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

beautiful emotions expressed SO well in this one...
very nice work!
take care, janet marie

 I love you
Is all that you can't say-
Years gone by and still...
Words don't come easily
Like I love you, I love you...
But you can say baby...
Baby can I hold you tonight
Maybe if I told you the right words
At the right time you'd be mine...
Tracy Chapman


WhtDove
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12 posted 02-21-2000 11:58 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Gloria no better way to express than from the heart! You did just that. Excellent!
 
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