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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
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0 posted 2000-02-21 04:11 AM


EVERYTHING WAS PERFECT


It was the perfect opportunity,
Seven days on the sea.
For two lovers to meet in unity,
Upon the oceans free.
Golden sunsets, walks on white sands
Such exotic scenery.
With other couples holding hands
And laughing lovingly.

But not by the waters, crystal clear
Nor the coral glowing below.
Could I ever hold this girl near,
Could I ever let my love show.
Not by a whisper, not by a touch,
Nor eyes that never met.
Nor by a need needed to much,
Was fate before us set.

The dining room, so elegant,
The view, pure beauty.
The nightly shows extravagant
None there would disagree.
Still something seemed circumspect,
No, it didn't take long to see
Yeah, everything was perfect...
But me.

Michael Anderson

I actually wrote this a couple of days ago with no intent of posting it.  However, I was subtley amused that Gen had come up with a poem about a man having to be "perfect" to hold her love...so I thought I'd share it with you all anyway.  Guess, I wasn't so far off in how I felt.




[This message has been edited by Michael (edited 02-21-2000).]

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Breathe~
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since 2000-02-05
Posts 315
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1 posted 2000-02-21 04:54 AM


You are incredibly talented...and your poetry is beautiful...but I am not saying anything you haven't heard a thousand times already...I'm sure...

Mostly...I know there is nothing to be said that will make you feel any better...nor help ease your pain...I just wish you the best...


 I love the time
and in between
the calm inside me
in the space
where I can breathe...

Sarah McLachlan

Marilyn
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since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada
2 posted 2000-02-21 07:43 AM


There's no such thing as perfect,
In this life we have to live.
All we have to go on,
Is what we have to give.

Your heart is pure,
Your friendship gold,
Your talent knows no bounds.
Believe in love and tenderness,
You know it can be found.

Someday you'll find a woman who,
Can treat you with respect.
One who will adore you,
That won't be circumspect.

Have faith my friend, in who you are,
Someday you'll win the prize.
There is someone who'll lose herself,
Right there, within your eyes.


Lost Dreamer
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since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464
Somewhere near the Rainbow
3 posted 2000-02-21 08:35 AM


Michael, With a heart of gold you don't need to be perfect, but Mailyn says it best in her response. Your words always capture the essense, nice job.
christies heart
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since 1999-08-10
Posts 189
NJ, USA
4 posted 2000-02-21 08:42 AM


Again, I don't know if it is usual to seek perfection. I've always just wanted honesty. The notion that perfection actually exist in any person is somehow sad.  

 Grant that I may not judge my niegbor until I have walked a mile in his moccasians

Native American prayer


hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
5 posted 2000-02-21 10:05 AM


Michael....perfection does not exist...true love looks beyond the imperfections
I hope one day you will find someone who does just that...you are a wonderful person imperfections or not  

Meadowmuse
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since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263

6 posted 2000-02-21 10:17 AM


The poetry of yours that I have read here has always been exceptional, and this piece holds true to that form, Michael. Sad, but superbly written.
Mistikman
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since 2000-01-10
Posts 682
San Jose, CA, USA
7 posted 2000-02-21 11:11 AM


Another masterpiece Michael, I can't really do much more than echo the responses of everyone before me. I hope things get better in your life, in one way or another.
WhtDove
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since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245
Illinois
8 posted 2000-02-21 11:51 AM


Channel through your poetry and prayer! I don't know what to say really. I have tears and I'm sorry you've been so hurt. You gave your all Michael and God knows that!  You remain in my prayers!  I'm lost for words, just know I care.

 <*\\\><

There's only two ways you can go...
One way you can save your riches,
And the other will save your soul.
Rich Mullins

devina
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since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539
Cali
9 posted 2000-02-21 02:29 PM


Fate has a way of showing you what's real and what's not hun, maybe this was for the best- I know that's easy to say, but I hold you and Femme very highly and I hope you both find what God planned out for you!!! You're a great man Michael...and time will heal your wounds, don't be so down on yourself, just live and let live sweetie!!! HUGS!!!! If you need to talk, you know I'm here!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

PhaerieChild
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since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787
Aloha, Oregon
10 posted 2000-02-21 02:57 PM


Well Michael again you have written so beautifully. As far as perfection goes.... there was only one perfect man and they crucified him.

 Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream.

Shawna R. Holder
Boise, Idaho



Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

11 posted 2000-02-21 04:29 PM


..."Not by a whisper, not by a touch,
Nor eyes that never met.
Nor by a need needed to much,
Was fate before us set."

I dont know Michael...
its perfect to me...(smile)
poetry in motion...as always...
take care, janet marie

 I love you
Is all that you can't say-
Years gone by and still...
Words don't come easily
Like I love you, I love you...
But you can say baby...
Baby can I hold you tonight
Maybe if I told you the right words
At the right time you'd be mine...
Tracy Chapman



Shelley
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since 2000-01-27
Posts 263
Ohio, USA
12 posted 2000-02-21 04:57 PM


My grandfather once told my that poetry could heal a broken heart or harden it to stone.
Just thought I would share that.



RainbowGirl
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since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023
United Kingdom
13 posted 2000-02-21 05:02 PM


I wish you both peace

HUSG

 Ouvrir mon coeur et âme

Severn
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since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

14 posted 2000-02-21 05:02 PM


I can only echo everyone else - there is no such thing as perfection in a person - if there were - how would the other person in a relationship ever live up to the 'perfect one'? How would a perfect person learn? YOu don't need to be perfect.

Beautiful poem.< !signature-->

 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath


[This message has been edited by Severn (edited 02-21-2000).]

Dark Angel
Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095

15 posted 2000-02-21 05:26 PM


No man or Woman is perfect and to expect that in a person, someone's gonna be waiting forever!!
Loved your poem Michael beautiful and very sad!!

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge



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