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Degrees of rhythm...

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Breathe~
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0 posted 02-21-2000 02:59 AM       View Profile for Breathe~   Email Breathe~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Breathe~

Locked in an embrace
Limbs here and there
Moving in intimate rhythm...

Fingers exploring coastlines
roaming peaks and valleys
mountains shifting against plains
in pleasurable tremors...

Casting steamy glances
foreheads meet in a salty kiss
as their eyes lock
trembling lips inches apart …

A trickle down her nape
his tongue yearns to steal
Pulling her against him
hard contours to pliant softness...

They move together
swaying a lovers dance
Hearts pounding
erotic rhythms…

Slowing reluctantly
as their song ends
Lingering gentle release
breathing eases to normal…

Strangers on a dance floor
they drift away from each other
their moment of sweet rhythm
already forgotten
as they scan the shadows
for a new partner

before the next dance begins...



 I love the time
and in between
the calm inside me
in the space
where I can breathe...

Sarah McLachlan
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Lost Dreamer
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1 posted 02-21-2000 10:18 AM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lost Dreamer

Wow, At first I thought this was posted in the wrong forum, and it turns out to just be a dance,but what a dance.
hoot_owl_rn
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2 posted 02-21-2000 10:38 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Wow....I'm with Gloria on this one....geat twist in the end, extreamly well written, great imagery  
Corazon
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3 posted 02-21-2000 01:39 PM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

wow will ditto both of the above lol....great images, great poem...I have always wondered how 2 strangers people can dance so intimately...and go on to the next....wow
Severn
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4 posted 02-21-2000 06:56 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Phew!

LOL - great work!

 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath
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5 posted 02-21-2000 07:00 PM       View Profile for freckles   Email freckles   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for freckles

Just BREATHE.......and ditto (or tritto or whatever the case may be) to all of the other comments.  I enjoyed this, Breathe.
Breathe~
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6 posted 02-21-2000 08:53 PM       View Profile for Breathe~   Email Breathe~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Breathe~

I guess the beginning IS a bit misleading...Hehe~

But I was thinking about that the other night...while out...watching all the folks dancing...passing each other around...
Dancing can be so intimate....and I kind of likened it to a relationship...and how partners come and go...

Thank you everyone!


 I love the time
and in between
the calm inside me
in the space
where I can breathe...

Sarah McLachlan
Martie
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7 posted 02-21-2000 09:06 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

I think I want to go dancing.  Wonderful poem!
Brent Hotchkin
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8 posted 02-21-2000 09:48 PM       View Profile for Brent Hotchkin   Email Brent Hotchkin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Brent Hotchkin

I agree with Martie. You've talked me into it Breathe. You did have me on quite a different track for a munite there. But you captured the intamacy of a dance perfectly. Will be looking for more of your work.  

Little Tree
Denise
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9 posted 02-21-2000 10:21 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Whew! Who turned up the temperature in here! This is good Breathe. Fabulous ending!

Denise
bobbycat
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10 posted 02-21-2000 10:39 PM       View Profile for bobbycat   Email bobbycat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bobbycat

Loved it, loved it, loved it!       

Bobbycat =^..^=


 ~~Blessed Be!~~
devina
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11 posted 02-21-2000 11:00 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

This was sensual and sexy...for being a dance and all!!! I thought it was gonna be this good just from the title, And I beleive I was right!!! This was more than GOOD!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
Breathe~
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12 posted 02-22-2000 01:46 AM       View Profile for Breathe~   Email Breathe~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Breathe~

I think the temperature hike is due to my blushing here....*smiling*

Martie...I'm ready whenever you are...

Brent...*grin*  As I will yours...Thanks!

Denise...I did!  Hehe~  and thanks...

Shank you bobby cat!  

Devina...Well thank you very kindly...Your poem was a bit steamy too...*grin*  and I liked it alot!


 I love the time
and in between
the calm inside me
in the space
where I can breathe...

Sarah McLachlan
JamesMichael
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13 posted 02-22-2000 06:25 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Very nice.  Slow dances can be very erotic.  James
 
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