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Happy Eating (Haiku)----first try so don't laugh

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Chris Goodman
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Sun warms coastal soil
Crab and shrimp wash up on bay
Pig roast over fire clay

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Who's laughing?     I think this is very cool indeed! I sure couldn't write one if someone held a gun to my head for it!  LOL  Very nice imagery in this....I have no clue if it's done "right"   (haiku format)  but I like it nonetheless....
Chris Goodman
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Ah, you are too nice.  I am blushing.
Anyway, INclan was kind enough to give me
the details about Classical Haiku.  I think
it is endearing and the simplicity is
refreshing.  
Chris

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A good first shot Chris.  There is no need to rhyme in Haiku.  Yes, Haiku is ALL about imagery....short and sweet.  Happy writing.

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Chris Goodman
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Thanks INclan,
I really wasn't trying to ryhme, but
that is what I ended up with.
I will keep the practice up.
Chris

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This is great Chris...although I really no nothing about the art of Haiku either...

Maybe one of the two of you could help me out also?

Chris

 Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.
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