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spiked
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since 2000-01-13
Posts 873
Hammond, La USA

0 posted 2000-02-20 06:09 PM


Days unsung
Thoughts controlled
Feeling repressed
Unbound soul

No complaints
No ones to blame
Thinking in-depth
All is the same

Looking from inside
Heart to my eyes
Seeing things different
Limitless skies

Each moment is given
To get to the next
The time we are living
Is only a guess

For each path is taken
On a whim that we felt
No sure path before us
We take what were dealt

Don’t look behind you
There’s nothing to see
No changing what’s done
So let it be

Move forward in love
Feel safe and at home
Your love is the answer
To questions unborn.



[This message has been edited by spiked (edited 02-20-2000).]

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poetFemmeFatale
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since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646
Arkansas
1 posted 2000-02-20 07:15 PM


This really touched something in me...So many of these little lines ring so true.  You really gave this one some thought.  I enjoyed it much - the 5th and 6th stanzas were amazing and powerful!  BANG!  You hit it right dead center....Bravo.
INclan
Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024
Indiana, USA
2 posted 2000-02-20 07:18 PM


Nicely written Spiked. I find myself unable to agree with certain of your assertions but that does not detract from a good poem. Keep up the good work.

INclan

Chris Goodman
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since 2000-01-28
Posts 92
Issaquah, Washington usa
3 posted 2000-02-20 08:14 PM


I have to agree with INclan, some of the stuff I don't agree with, but well-written & easy on the eyes.  
Chris

 Blue Moon

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

4 posted 2000-02-20 08:29 PM


Sounds like you are writing from a happier
place these days--how I wish I could relate
to this...but I am happy for you, tho.  Nice.

spiked
Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873
Hammond, La USA
5 posted 2000-02-20 11:34 PM


Not sure where this one came from wrote it this morning.
Not sure I fully agree with what I wrote myself, but somethings aren't written but write themselves. Thanks for the support and serenity not everything is always as dark or as light as we think. Keep your chin up.

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