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HelmutB
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since 2000-01-06
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0 posted 2000-02-20 08:23 AM


My Lady

Morning descends upon the hill
Cold is the air with nightly chill
Commoners begin to flow into the street
The daily life begins like a seed
I look down the alley with squinting eye
I ask my soul, why do I miss her, why
I see what they brought to this busy place of all
Fruits, weeds, seeds and vegetable
The lyre is playing a haunting weep
Missing your touch, oh so deep
I cast my eyes across the thoroughfare
I can't see, but wish you would be there
The sun sets down there over the hill
The WEE folks leave and the air gets a chill
My Lady I did not find you today
My Lady I could not say
My Lady the words weren't said
My horse is tired and I have to go to bed
Tomorrow perhaps, when the sun will shine
Mom will let me go and perhaps My Lady you'll be mine
I put on my costume of glitter and sword
I will saddle up my wooden horse
Perhaps tomorrow My Lady your mine
Be gentle with me, for I'm only nine.
  



 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.


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Lost Dreamer
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Somewhere near the Rainbow
1 posted 2000-02-20 08:29 AM


HelmutB, This poem is oh so precious, I absolutely love it. The twist is perfect, thanks for this great read first thing in the morning  

[This message has been edited by Lost Dreamer (edited 02-20-2000).]

hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
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2 posted 2000-02-20 08:36 AM


Oh Helmut....this is so sweet  
Meadowmuse
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3 posted 2000-02-20 08:37 AM


Helmut, I'm glad you posted this. I love it, of course. You've a wonderful way of expressing your unique and imaginative creations! This piece is perfectly magical, especially with its "wee" bit of whimsy.  

L.and S.P.
Claire

sonjes
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since 2000-02-18
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North Carolina
4 posted 2000-02-20 09:29 AM


I love the atmosphere you created in this work.  The historical setting is the perfect background for your artistic words.  I was entranced by the emotion felt by the "knight" and then I was forced to smile when the truth was revealed.  Absolutely, positively loved it!
Martie
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5 posted 2000-02-20 11:02 AM


Helmut, this is wonderful!
HelmutB
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6 posted 2000-02-20 06:28 PM


Lost Dreamer
I thank thee for such elegant reply

hoot_owl_rn
Thank you butit's not quiet as sweey as someone I know  

Meadowmuse
Thank you, May this made known: That wee folks and an enchanting Lady inspired this piece. L. & S. P. ((((you)))). And thanks for loving this   means a lot to me
    
sonjes
Thank you for your reply. i love the stories told of Knight and My Lady. I'm glad you liked it. May this smile forever dwell in your heart.

Martie
Thank you, but you got it all worng. It's you that's wonderful!    


 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.


devina
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since 1999-10-28
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Cali
7 posted 2000-02-20 06:46 PM


Helmut, this is so cute!!! I probably said AWE!!! loud enough for you to here me over there!!! Take care sweetie!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

HelmutB
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since 2000-01-06
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Canada
8 posted 2000-02-21 06:31 AM


My Lady of the Rose
Your "Awe" is rining still in my ears
and will go on
You're very kind to thee
Thanks sweetie  

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.


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