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Compgirl
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since 2000-02-19
Posts 85
USA

0 posted 2000-02-20 03:07 AM


His long white jacket with his clean cut style
"there is nothing more we can do"
he spoke for awhile.
My mind drifted with the chill in the air
numb and wounded
no sign of emotion or care.
My body, my mind, never at ease
this virus that is growing
has taken its toll on me.
Do I tell my loved ones that my time is few
see that look in their eyes
knowing that our dreams will never come true.
I am not a writer or an open book
hiding my life from the ones I hold dear
unloading all my emotions for stargers to hear.


© Copyright 2000 Patty Lynn - All Rights Reserved
INclan
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since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024
Indiana, USA
1 posted 2000-02-20 07:57 AM


Hard to respond to this poem, Compgirl.  If this is real life, then I grieve with you. I find that talking about problems...even to strangers can help ease the burdon I carry. I truely hope all is well with you.

INclan

Meadowmuse
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since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263

2 posted 2000-02-20 11:21 AM


Compgirl...interesting piece, sobering topic. Keep writing!


Compgirl
Member
since 2000-02-19
Posts 85
USA
3 posted 2000-02-20 12:33 PM


It was 3:00am and I couldn't sleep. I know this is a sad and not well composed poem. I was diagnosed with cancer a year and a half ago and this was my story after an appointment the other day. I needed to unload my bottled up feeling and this seemed to be the way that I did it. Don't shed a tear, just an understanding smile.  
twinsgd
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since 2000-02-13
Posts 416
Ontario,Canada
4 posted 2000-02-20 09:06 PM


If I may be so bold
Dear Compgirl....I too have a friend who would pay me tributes not unlike your own {undeserved in my case I believe} . I have read both your postings and just wished to make sure you share both with him. Being a friend he will want nothing more than to be there to help you through. God bless you.

Breathe~
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since 2000-02-05
Posts 315
Washington...
5 posted 2000-02-20 09:12 PM


I'm so sorry...and I agree with INclan...it's hard to know what to say...

"wonderful poem" seems so inadequate when the content is so tragic...

but this is a wonderful poem...I can only hope for the best for you...You are in my prayers...


 Freedom of expression is the watch word...


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