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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2000-02-19 01:37 AM


White horse, moonlight--
   inviting tonight--
silver-tipped fog delight--
   gun-metal, slipping in and out--
      savor taste desired...
next-best-thing to a silent shout--
   feeling now expired.

A rose in full, drops a petal--
   then yearns to be all together.

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1 posted 2000-02-19 03:23 AM


I really enjoyed this poem.  Lots to be drawn from it.  Especially liked the ending.


Michael

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2 posted 2000-02-19 03:52 AM


Thank you, my friend, for tending to such lonely business tonight...I understand...
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3 posted 2000-02-19 04:11 AM


aye the last two lines were all i understood but lo they were killer and i know i liked it much
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4 posted 2000-02-19 07:02 AM


Serenity~
Hey, I like this.
Very lovely.  Very sensual.
~*Marge*~


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5 posted 2000-02-20 01:15 AM


wayoutwalt,
you are not that way out... Glad I could strike a chord...

Marge:  I am always thrilled to hear from you.
Happy, a bit, that you caught the sensuality
of it all, but it is RELUCTANT sensuality...

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6 posted 2000-02-20 11:51 PM


I've read this a few times and feel something different everytime. Not sure how to describe it but like what it does to me.
Well Done
Rich

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7 posted 2011-09-05 03:35 AM


Love all of this.  Really love this
quote:
A rose in full, drops a petal--
   then yearns to be all together.


serenity blaze
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8 posted 2011-09-05 06:41 PM


Ali....this is sooooooo serendipitous of you.

I was just telling a Pipfriend that I really don't care for my own words, but that I've written a couple of lines that I don't hate so much.

What you quoted above is exactly what I'd quoted to him--and I probably like that line because it so aptly describes how I feel about myself...

I think that most people have figured out that beneath all of my jokes and humor, there is an underground river of sadness and regret. I used to imagine being someone else, but then, what would become of baby Karen, eh?

*hearthugs*

Only someone who feels that same pain would choose such a line. I want you to know that I think you're lovely, inside and out.

Thank you for digging through the archives to reach through the screen to find...me.


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9 posted 2011-09-05 09:00 PM


What a treasure of you there is to find.  Does that make sense?

xoxoxo
A

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