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Mike
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0 posted 2000-02-18 06:09 PM


Dark shadows dance in glowing embers,
Crackling whispers, forgotten places,
Upon stone hearth, as night remembers,
Memories past in caldron's faces.

Curling wisps of pugent fingers,
By unseen hand, up flue are taken,
Left behind as smoke's scent lingers,
Forgotten times, blaze doth awaken.

In blackened coals of long doused fire,
Ghosts of time remain unburied,
In dormant slumber, 'neath fiery spires,
Eternally in ash are carried.

Past and present, one the same,
Mesmerized by siren's flame.


[This message has been edited by Mike (edited 02-19-2000).]

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Elizabeth
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1 posted 2000-02-18 06:16 PM


Wow-what a picture that first line paints! I enjoy your work, Mike, very much.

Elizabeth

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2 posted 2000-02-18 06:29 PM


Oh, wow! Where do you come up with these images! Marvelous as always. Your poetry is alwasy like a painting for the soul! Thank you for sharing your talent with us!  

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3 posted 2000-02-18 06:32 PM


Oh, I liked the feel of this Mike.  Steeped in time and mystery and a little frightening, and all the sensory feelings drew a perfect picture.  Very well done!
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4 posted 2000-02-18 08:19 PM


Excellent writing, Mike! As usual!  

Denise

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5 posted 2000-02-18 08:46 PM


Wonderful Tim. True midevil mystical ambiance to this one. Well done!
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6 posted 2000-02-18 09:54 PM


Wow.  Take me there! You swept me right into this scene, this ambience.

Corinne

Mike
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7 posted 2000-02-19 10:13 AM


Thank you all for your very gracious comments.  Glad you enjoyed.
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8 posted 2000-02-19 10:25 AM


A mesmerizing piece of writing...darkened intrigue smoldering within the stone hearth of the night.  
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9 posted 2000-02-19 10:28 AM


Beautiful imagery. nice flow as well. Good job!

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I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

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10 posted 2000-02-20 06:22 PM


Mike~
Very intimate and loving piece.
Much too pretty to escape so quickly.
Back to the top for others to enjoy.
~*Marge*~


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