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Denise
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0 posted 02-18-2000 11:13 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Denise

A one way street this friendship has become
The circle has been broken, so it seems
Your words were once to me as smoothest rum
That warmed my soul and filled my heart with dreams.

You coldly turned away and left a chill
The frigid air then formed an icy glaze
Yet through the storm I waited for you still
For one small word could set my world ablaze.

The anguish caused by you will one day end
And in its place will be a precious gem
A priceless treasure, wisdom’s dividend
Naivete will have its requiem.

Remember these my words 'midst bitter tears
When loneliness consumes your latter years.  



 Denise

And slight is the sting of his trouble
Whose winnings are less than his worth;
For he who is honest is noble,
Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~



[This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 02-18-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Denise - All Rights Reserved
hoot_owl_rn
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1 posted 02-18-2000 11:16 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Wow...this is a very powerful piece Denise...I can only say I am glad I am not on the recieving end of this one. Well written my friend
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2 posted 02-18-2000 11:21 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Denise this is sad!  Some fall by the wayside, but they weren't true to start with.
Though it always hurts!  Well done my friend! HUGS and more HUGS

 <*\\\><

There's only two ways you can go...
One way you can save your riches,
And the other will save your soul.
Rich Mullins
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3 posted 02-18-2000 11:26 AM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lost Dreamer

You expressed your emotions with such passion in this poem, glad I'm not the person either that this relates to, but if I was, I would hope I had the sense to knock on your door long before it came to this.

Denise, This is excellent, Keep them rolling don't stop now, I see a sapling growing into a tree.
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4 posted 02-18-2000 11:31 AM       View Profile for U K Hero   Email U K Hero   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for U K Hero

I loved the flow and feeling very much
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5 posted 02-18-2000 12:20 PM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

"Naivete will have it's requiem"
That's what I call originality!
Denise, enjoy all your work and your kind words about mine.
Danny
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6 posted 02-18-2000 12:44 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

This is sad but full of such positive personal power--I just want to say--you go girl!!
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7 posted 02-18-2000 01:13 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Beautifully expressed, my sonnet queen. You write so well, especially when you're in a huff.
You showed him!
Love ya
Liz
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8 posted 02-18-2000 01:15 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

Don't ever let anyone take advantage of you sweetheart...you're too good for that!!!! Your last two lines make the poem m'friend!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
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9 posted 02-18-2000 02:43 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Wow! Thank you all for your wonderful responses! I always aprreciate your reading and commenting!  

Liz - maybe I should get in a huff more often...it seems to do wonders for my writer's block...hehehehe  

Thanks again everybody!!  
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10 posted 02-18-2000 07:18 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

I changed this a little. I think it is better now!  
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11 posted 02-18-2000 08:48 PM       View Profile for BSC   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BSC

Wow, wonderful, powerful poem and the timing is perfect, my friend is doing the same to me and I have no idea why...It isn't easy, probably one of the hardest things I've gone through...but she doesn't seem to care, sad to see it's not only me.  I hope all works out for you soon.
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Yep - Don't be messin' with this lady's heart... Them's fightin' words in her sonnets..

Nice one, Denise - It speaks volumes..
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Denise, this is so powerful and beautifully written.  You say so much with such few words. Excellent, my friend.  
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14 posted 02-19-2000 01:17 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Thank you BSC,Nan and Eloise for your kind responses. I'm glad you liked it!  

BSC- I suppose this is just one of those heartbreaking things in life that we have to accept. Perhaps they were never really friends to begin with, as WhtDove said above, but as in everything that comes our way in life we have to look for the silver lining and take whatever lessons we have learned and go on, much wiser for the experience. I'm sorry for your present pain, too. HUGS
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15 posted 02-19-2000 01:22 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Inspired and poetic. If this piece is a result of anger, I must commend your healing craft.  
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16 posted 02-19-2000 04:37 PM       View Profile for Cerenity   Email Cerenity   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cerenity

Hi there sweetie,   It's Cerenity-1 (AKA: Cerenity)

WOW,WOW  again I have been hidding from a friend because she was very mean to me, but know that I read this I think I'm going to call her and set up some thing because I would never want any one to ever feel that way about me even if she treated me the way she did.


Thank you so much, Cerenity-1
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17 posted 02-19-2000 06:38 PM       View Profile for Cypher   Email Cypher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cypher

Denise,
I loved the line:
Naivete will have its requiem

Wonderful job.

-Cypher-
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18 posted 02-19-2000 08:55 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Great writing, Denise! Who could turn their back on someone like you?  
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19 posted 02-19-2000 09:05 PM       View Profile for Julie   Email Julie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Julie

Wow Denise you said a lot here. Very well done.
Denise
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20 posted 02-19-2000 11:26 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Claire, Cerenity, Cypher, Balladeer and Julie, Thank you for reading and for your lovely comments!

Denise
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I found that as I read this, I became sad for you and this person. For you to have been treated as such, and for the person not knowing what type of heart they were betraying. Good bit. And thanks for your kind words on my postings. James
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22 posted 02-19-2000 11:54 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Denise~
How or why anyone would want to absent
themselves from your friendship is lost on me.

Great feelings in this one, hon.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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23 posted 02-20-2000 12:01 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

I love this because (how's this for a strange parallel?) like the music of nine inch nails, you manage to show the extreme beauty and power of words, even when working up into a rage. Great work, and a reminder there's always something worthwhile to go on to.

Mike
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This is a great poem, Denise, let's hope they see sense and get in touch! (((HUGS)))

 All of my life I've been searching for the words to say how I feel........ - Phil Collins.
 
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