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love and cellophane

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bsquirrel
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0 posted 02-17-2000 11:30 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for bsquirrel

-love and cellophane-
Take a left toward the beach,
Hold the silence of boats and birds.
Listen to conversations in the sand.
(shell to water:
lately, you've been cold.
water to shell:
this relationship's getting old.)

Look out an obscure pane at the waves.
From the dockhouse, they seem to barely waver,
Barely cover till you get closer.
Closer.
closer.
Drenched.

Once you're properly chilled,
You'll realize your reasoning is a wheel with holes.
Not jettisoning spokes of light,
Just deflating in sags of rubber.

It was a collision of gold that caused the break,
Seeing spokes of light from someone else's wheel.
You thought its simple existence would bear you home,
Covering you in attractive, confident truth.

You didn't realize she was just better at pretending than you.

Her mind was an isolated music scene:
windchimes, clock gear percussion, damaged xylophone teeth,
solos salted, sobs frosted;
the list is exhausted.

But as you both glowed, touching together on the dock,
You were tearing yrselves slowly apart.
Eighteen degrees of separation:
mind to mind, body to body, eye to eye, blood to blood,
bone to bone, home to home, fear to fear, gear to gear,
ear to ear, tooth to tooth, lie to truth; finish list as needed.

The architecture is daunting and haunted.
Happy or not, here they come.
You two are so in love with bed,
Do you remember the color blue?
You thought your flat tire had become a potter's wheel.
Creation -- spinning, loping creation! finally in your view.

She thought her music was stronger with him,
But only the deaf sensed its vibrations.
Before him, she had felt alone.
Contempt bore her body around.
Seeing others happiness;
"Oh, I could do that!"

Now with him, she's an expert.
Through a lens of magnified anger she doesn't understand,
She leans into him, bitter smiling.
"Here's hoping you're feeling better."

Shell and water, some bits of sand,
Floating in a cup, months of reflection,
Steeped in light and sound.

Some late unpleasantness.
Too many hammers at dawn.
Too much like a cactus highway --
Control zero, starting back down.

But she shares details with her friends.
Yes, it would be really pretty for them;
Makeup over the lack.

Now it's killing music.
Slow loping brain cells
Lulled in their cells,
Talking on their cells,
Drawing what happiness must look like on cels.

His cellophane layer is torn.
Something beating beneath causes it to buzz,
Distorts his smile.
Coldtonguewarmheartlifeform.
Fake clouds and instant rice.

Both are looking for replacements.
Both are feeling real nice.

(sand to foot:
please stop stepping on me.
foot's reply:
no. crushing you sets me free!)

© Copyright 2000 MPC - All Rights Reserved
serenity blaze
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1 posted 02-18-2000 12:04 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Impeccable, 'b'!  A unique style that captures the essence of feeling as it is being felt--wonderful symbolic images.  Great
read!
bsquirrel
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2 posted 02-18-2000 12:09 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Thanks, 's'.  

Mike
CMGrimm
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3 posted 02-18-2000 09:18 AM       View Profile for CMGrimm   Email CMGrimm   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CMGrimm

Wow.  Just WOW.

Again you pull me into the deeper side of emotions and I am at awe.  
Thanks for a wonderful read.

Chris

 Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.
Meadowmuse
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4 posted 02-18-2000 09:40 AM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

I like your contemporary, metaphorical style and continuity here. Very creative title and work.  

Claire
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5 posted 02-21-2000 11:19 AM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

Once you're properly chilled,
You'll realize your reasoning is a wheel with holes.
Not jettisoning spokes of light,
Just deflating in sags of rubber.

wow, again you blow me away...gonna print this one too....I swear you take a tour of my  mind before you write these....excellent work....lots and lots to think about in this one....
bsquirrel
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6 posted 05-22-2002 07:42 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Ah'm overwhelmed -- mainly 'cause ah'm beginnin' to realize ah wasn't as bad as ah thought ... which is nice. Thanks, friends.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

 
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