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tori
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0 posted 2000-02-17 12:25 PM


"Not"

I have no idea the reasons why
And all I do is sit and cry
For so long my friend was here
Deeded trust his strong shoulders bare
Did he in return, not find it there?

Could it be I took for granted
This one with winded wings
Who flew into my life  
And bought to me the finer things?

Now my mind has twisted in tangle
Was there something I did wrong
that caused friendship to mangle?

I always thought this was so,
a friendship that could only grow
For all of time he's in my heart,
for there he own's a special part

Its not his nature to stay  away
With out a reason for his delay
Please God, give some kind of clue
On what it is we're going through

Even if the skies look  gray,
let his words come pouring out my way
I ask of You to take my hand
And help me Reach to the soul of this man
Help with answers in his darken plight
I'm here for him . And ALL is Right

Give me a turn to lend an ear
All that echo's I will hear
I beg you Lord to take control
Ease the pain within our soul's

And if he's out there listening in
Please let him know that
"I need him!"
And if it is, our way's must part
Forever he shall hold my heart
But never will I comprehend
Life with out my dearest friend

Tori 2000




 If with pen in hand I've made you think
I've not wasted one drop of ink
Vlh.
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SEA
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1 posted 2000-02-17 01:13 PM


Tori~ with tears running down my face,
"But never will I comprehend Life without my dearest friend" echos through my heart. After this morning I now read this and hurt all over again. I keep trying to choke it back. My New year's resolution was to stop writting him and his wife and hope to hear from them. I am weak I guess. I hate feeling like I'm begging for friendship. I love your poem.-SEA

January Flowers
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2 posted 2000-02-17 01:26 PM


Tori-
Beautiful cry for a friend.
Just beautiful.

tori
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3 posted 2000-02-17 09:33 PM


Thanks Sea I do know how you feel.. a little like my right hand dosent know what the left is doing.. I hope things get better soon for both of us...

Thanks JF!


 If with pen in hand I've made you think
I've not wasted one drop of ink
Vlh.
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4 posted 2000-02-17 10:33 PM


This is so sad and so beautiful, Tori. I sure hope things work out for you two.

Denise

WhtDove
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5 posted 2000-02-17 10:40 PM


Tori, this tugs at the heartstrings. Girl what's up? Like I can't guess from the poem! You know I'm here if you need to talk girlfriend! Sniff, sniff...

 <*\\\><

There's only two ways you can go...
One way you can save your riches,
And the other will save your soul.
Rich Mullins

tori
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6 posted 2000-02-18 12:59 PM


Thanks Denise and Dove, I'lll be talking to ya gir.. real soon.. sniff sniff.

 If with pen in hand I've made you think
I've not wasted one drop of ink
Vlh.
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Nan
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7 posted 2000-02-19 09:56 AM


Sometimes those closest to us think they'll hurt us more by telling us their feelings than not... Not so - dealing with truth is far better than dealing with the unknown... Well put, my friend..
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8 posted 2000-02-20 06:27 PM


Tori~
This is hauntingly sad.
Hopefully he will surface to let
you know where he stands.
No friendship is worth forgetting for sure.
*HUGS* to you.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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vandana
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9 posted 2000-02-20 07:45 PM


Very nice poem
HelmutB
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10 posted 2000-02-20 07:50 PM


Tori, what a poem you created
It certainly made my eyes wet
I hope that your friend is still there
Never knowing if a poem is based on true events, current or past, makes it difficult not to run over to you and to hug you real bad.
HUGS


 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.


Breathe~
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11 posted 2000-02-20 09:42 PM


WOW!...I have chills...

I hope this man finds his way back to you...soon...


 Freedom of expression is the watch word...


tori
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12 posted 2000-02-20 11:22 PM


Thank you all for your kind words and support!

 If with pen in hand I've made you think
I've not wasted one drop of ink
Vlh.
visit my site~ http://www.hsanet.net/user/dkm/hellomy.htm

One Who Understands
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13 posted 2000-02-21 03:33 AM


What a wonderful poem

It makes me smile to think of my dearest friends.  And how true, your closing line!

I love it

Glorfindel
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14 posted 2000-02-21 06:26 AM


I think you need a big one of these:

**HUGS**


now smile and have a laugh with a friend an I hope you feel better for it, but don't even think about stopping writing!! just too damn good at it.

 Let winds rage, seas boil and years curse,
My love shal live everyoung in my verse.

tori
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since 1999-06-18
Posts 520
Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA
15 posted 2000-02-22 11:06 AM


They are words from the heart One Who!

Glorfindel your hug was right on time... I thank you !!



 If with pen in hand I've made you think
I've not wasted one drop of ink
Vlh.
visit my site~ http://www.hsanet.net/user/dkm/hellomy.htm

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