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Happy" (a post from my second-grader)

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January Flowers
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0 posted 02-17-2000 09:44 AM       View Profile for January Flowers   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for January Flowers

My son likes to write in his journal while I do my own creative writing.  Having noticed my interest in poetry, he has been writing a lot of rhyming things lately.  This poem, however, is a real break through for him, as he's been dealing with some very stressful transitions.  It warms my heart to know he can express so wonderfully in his writing the way he is feeling...


"Happy"
by D.J.

At home in bed I lay asleep,
all the dreams that come I can't keep.
The ones of joy and happiness
when I'm awake are ones I miss.

I'm happy now, don't get me wrong,
my dreams they never last too long.
And now awake I feel a smile
come from inside me all the while.

I've learned in dreams how to feel
the happiness that's in me still.


[This message has been edited by January Flowers (edited 02-17-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Sherry Lampack - All Rights Reserved
Danny Holloway
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1 posted 02-17-2000 09:51 AM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

This is a very nice poem, and unique as well. You have good reason to be proud of your son.  Probably be a poet like mom!
Danny
Denise
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2 posted 02-17-2000 10:01 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Talent seems to run in the family! This is a wonderful poem!  

Denise
wayoutwalt
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very very nice im trying to get my 2nd grader to write a poem but tiz like pullin teeth (ow)
CMGrimm
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4 posted 02-17-2000 10:27 AM       View Profile for CMGrimm   Email CMGrimm   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CMGrimm

Very good... do you think he would be up to giving some writing lessons...I really could use some help.

Thanks for a wonderful read.

Chris

 Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.
Meadowmuse
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This is precious, and does seem to reflect a sense of healing. Please tell him that his poem is GREAT!   I love it when children are encouraged to write...good job, Mom!

Wizzard
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6 posted 02-17-2000 12:45 PM       View Profile for Wizzard   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wizzard


What a great display of talent your lil one has shown here    
A young man with that much talent will surely have girl`s ringing the phone off the hook when he get`s a lil older

Look`s to me like he`s had a Great Teacher.
I hope that your feeling better and were able to put aside those boxes of Tissue?
Thank`s for sharing Mom    



 Today is the first day of the rest of my life.
And the begining of a new one.





[This message has been edited by Wizzard (edited 02-17-2000).]
January Flowers
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7 posted 02-17-2000 02:57 PM       View Profile for January Flowers   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for January Flowers

Thanks, everyone!
I knew I could count on you to brighten his
self-esteem.
It seems "we" are not the only ones to benefit
from the replies...
He couldn't wait to get home from school
and see what everyone thought.
THAT alone encourages his writing emensely!
Thanks, again!
I am very, very proud of him.
JOY 14
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This is fantastic!  Such real emotions shown.  Your son has great talent.  I give him lots of smiles!!!!!        

Joy
Wizzard
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9 posted 02-17-2000 09:22 PM       View Profile for Wizzard   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wizzard

To the Little Man of Passion`s,I was so impressed with your talent that this old hedgehog had to come back and give you a BIG HUGJust to let you know that I am proud of you and your writing skill`s.

Your Buddy the Wizzard


 Today is the first day of the rest of my life.
And the begining of a new one.

Seymour Tabin
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10 posted 02-17-2000 09:28 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

January,
Enjoyed the poem, tell him to keep writing he is good.
 
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