navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #6 » A thousand miles
Open Poetry #6
Post A Reply Post New Topic A thousand miles Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
Nikkisweet
Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 183
Tx, Dallas

0 posted 2000-02-17 01:14 AM



The sun may not rise
The dark may not fall
But you will always
Be my All in all

The only thing that
Could keep me away from you
Is a thousand miles
Seperating us so very far

I could not walk
Nor swim or drive
For I'm just a kid
No way to get to you at all

So no matter how far apart we are
Even a thousand miles
I will always think of you
And hope you think of me too.

You're my future,my love, my life
So when I get older
A thousand miles
Will mean nothing to me.



© Copyright 2000 Nikkisweet - All Rights Reserved
bsquirrel
Deputy Moderator 5 Tours
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855

1 posted 2000-02-17 01:25 AM


The rhythm kinda flounders around a little, but I choose to think you did that on purpose to show how love acts the same way. Right? RRIIIIIGGGHHHHT?   Another fun read.

M.

Nikkisweet
Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 183
Tx, Dallas
2 posted 2000-02-17 01:26 AM


This is about my boyfriend I had for three years and he had to move a thousand miles away.

tracie66
Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713
Australia
3 posted 2000-02-18 03:38 AM


Nikki sweet poem, you wrote that straight from the heart I could tell. True love can overcome great distances...Hugs Tracie  
CMGrimm
Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685
USA
4 posted 2000-02-18 09:27 AM


A poem from the heart will always capture it's reader's heart Nikki...
You've captured mine here.   Wonderful read. One of the sweetest sentiments I've read in a long time.  Keep it up young pup, you've got alot of skill and PASSION in you, I can tell.

Thanks for the great read.


Chris.

 Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.

Cerenity
Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637
Escondido-California
5 posted 2000-02-20 11:58 AM


Hi there sweetie,

True love sustains no matter what,it aslo keeps ones heart a float no matter the distance.
I liked this poem alot look forward to more of your work.

Cerenity-1

Parker
Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129
ON
6 posted 2000-02-20 12:43 PM


Nikkisweet, I like alot, this work from your heart.

Parker

Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #6 » A thousand miles

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary