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Somthing I wrote (is it good?)
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Somthing I wrote (is it good?) |
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Nikkisweet Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 183Tx, Dallas |
I know things are bad Don't get mad I know it can be tough Please be rough Please don't frown Write your thoughts down Mabye in a letter Don't worry it'll get better Try eating some junk food It might put you in a better mood Go for a walk And mabye a little talk Just know I'm there for you And that I love you too Put on a smile As long as a mile........ (Deticated to my friend who is having some family trouble. It'll be ok.)  [This message has been edited by Nikkisweet (edited 02-17-2000).] |
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Nikkisweet Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 183Tx, Dallas |
1st part of the poem 3rd line. It is soposed to be tough,not rough |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
Very sweet Nikki.... Very well rhymed, well structured poem. Your friend is very lucky to have someone who cares for them as much as you do. Thanks for sharing that with us. I'll hold your friend in my prayers. (By the way, never ask if it is good. Only YOU know the answer to that question. Poetry that comes from the heart will find an audience of it's own, so long as you allow the audience to be graced by it.)(But, for the sake of answering your question, yes it is.) Chris Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
nikki this is cute. i like it. you can edit your mistakes if you realize them after.(I do it All the time) Rich [This message has been edited by spiked (edited 02-17-2000).] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Nikkisweet, you can go into the edit function and change it. Click on the icon with the pencil above your poem. Then click on the submit button and it's fixed! Nice poem! Welcome to Passions! Denise |
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just_another_fe Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 483MICHIGAN |
THIS IS A GOOD POEM BUT YOU SHOULD GO BACK THROUGH AND EDIT IT. MABYE = MAYBE . I SEE YOU RELPIED INSTEAD OF CHANGING IT . DO YOU NOT KNOW HOW/ ALL YOU GOTTA DO HUN IS GO TO THE TOP WHERE THE ICONS ARE AND CLICK ON THE LITTLE ICON THAT IS A PEICE OF PAPER AND A PENCIL. IF YOU KNOW HOW THEN SORRY IM JUST TRYING TO HELP YOU OUT |
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Nikkisweet Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 183Tx, Dallas |
Thanks guys!! |
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