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Breathe~
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0 posted 02-16-2000 07:57 PM       View Profile for Breathe~   Email Breathe~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Breathe~

She sits in the midst of a field
budding green grass
as far as the eye can see
a minature emerald forest
idly tickling the bottom of her soles...


Her eyes fill with familiar tears
blurring the progress of aimless clouds
as they glide gracefully across the sky
with simplistic freedom
fluffy cocoons
unknowing of their destination...

Flowers with colorful crowns
sway in the gentle breeze
bowing to kiss the salt
from her stained cheek
their petals smiling happily at the sun...

The beauty of the vision before her
leaves her breathless
and haunted by memories shared
disturbing in their freshness
yet delicious in their torment
She wants desperately to believe
in this illusion
in him...

Yet truth prevails
with Fates devastating hand
exposing the distortions
within her fragile illusion
The liar is seen
his deceptive mask
falling from her eyes

Oceans of jutting green blades
yellow
shriveling in upon themselves
in a slow death
to become dust
upon winters first touch...

Clouds once embraced by the sky
lie victim to the deceptions harsh kiss
fragile shells faltering
breaking apart
their desperate tears falling
lost upon the earth
forgotten...

Delicate flowered heads
once vivacious
drawn helplessly to the ground
to die upon the grass
unforgettable performance
now done
brilliance exhausted
silken petals browning
color disintegrating beneath her fingers...
blending with
the whispers of her broken heart...




 Freedom of expression is the watch word...

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1 posted 02-16-2000 08:18 PM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

Breathe~ I can't believe that no one has responded to this yet. This is so beautiful and so very sad. But hey! Spring is around the corner and your flowers will bloom in your heart again.   -SEA
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Well my excuse could be I just logged on
But I read this poem for some time and twice
to make sure it's not an illusion
Plainly enchanting, and so nice
Thank you, it's like a fresh Brezze going through my mind

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

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3 posted 02-16-2000 09:20 PM       View Profile for Breathe~   Email Breathe~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Breathe~

SEA...Well...thank you!  I dunno..maybe title is an illusion in itself...*L*

HelmutB...Sometime and twice?  Wow...thanks!...I'm glad it warranted a second looking over...*beaming*

Stop by anytime and read it to your hearts content...bring some of your friend...I sure don't mind!  


 Freedom of expression is the watch word...

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Breathe~
written with such description
and elloquent wording.
This poem "breaths" of such strong emotion.
I really liked the change of season with
the "discoverance" of the deception.
So visually real in your wording.
Keep up the great expression!
Breathe~
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5 posted 02-16-2000 11:24 PM       View Profile for Breathe~   Email Breathe~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Breathe~

Changes of the seasons...changes of the heart...I hope...it's an ongoing battle, I'm afraid...

Thank you so much!  


 Freedom of expression is the watch word...

CMGrimm
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6 posted 02-16-2000 11:38 PM       View Profile for CMGrimm   Email CMGrimm   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CMGrimm

"Clouds once embraced by the sky
lie victim to the deceptions harsh kiss
fragile shells faltering
breaking apart
their desperate tears falling
lost upon the earth
forgotten... "


WOW!!!!

I've been captured by your use of the language in this.  Such descriptions, such imagery.  I love you.  

Thanks for a splendid read.


Chris

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7 posted 02-16-2000 11:51 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Ahhh, this is so beautiful, Breathe! Breathtaking!  

Denise
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8 posted 02-17-2000 10:57 AM       View Profile for Breathe~   Email Breathe~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Breathe~

Chris....WOW!...well if you have no "masks of deception" on your person....I might be interested in loving you too...*grin*  Thanks!

Denise...Thank you!   )


 Freedom of expression is the watch word...

 
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