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devinmaria
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since 02-14-2000
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Middletown, Ohio


0 posted 02-16-2000 12:58 PM       View Profile for devinmaria   Email devinmaria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit devinmaria's Home Page   View IP for devinmaria

thoughts of doubt
only thoughts of why
you say sadness hides
in the pupils of my eyes
troublesome words
slither from my lips
confusing looks
make your stomach do flips
paramoia lurks aimlessly
deep in your thoughts
aimlessly paranoid
deeply distraut
words meaning little
the search for attention
looks falsely communicate
the longing for affection
unexplanable
the wierdness i show
aimlessly paranoid
hiding? no


 Trust I seek and I find in you. Everyday for us something new. Open mind for a different view, and nothing else matters. --Metallica
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Meadowmuse
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since 12-27-1999
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1 posted 02-16-2000 02:11 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

An interesting darkness here, an intriguing piece. I liked your ~

"you say sadness hides
in the pupils of my eyes"

Keep writing!
Claire
HelmutB
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since 01-06-2000
Posts 989
Canada


2 posted 02-16-2000 09:22 PM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

I don't think that you have anything to hide
I liked your poem, well done



 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

Parker
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since 01-06-2000
Posts 3135
... the old black rum


3 posted 02-16-2000 10:31 PM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

I really like the style, us used here. Great poem.

Parker
devina
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since 10-28-1999
Posts 3189
Northern Cali


4 posted 02-16-2000 10:55 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

I can see that you're to the point huh??? You've stated your case well...with a powerful ending!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
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