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devinmaria Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 130Middletown, Ohio |
thoughts of doubt only thoughts of why you say sadness hides in the pupils of my eyes troublesome words slither from my lips confusing looks make your stomach do flips paramoia lurks aimlessly deep in your thoughts aimlessly paranoid deeply distraut words meaning little the search for attention looks falsely communicate the longing for affection unexplanable the wierdness i show aimlessly paranoid hiding? no Trust I seek and I find in you. Everyday for us something new. Open mind for a different view, and nothing else matters. --Metallica |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
An interesting darkness here, an intriguing piece. I liked your ~ "you say sadness hides in the pupils of my eyes" Keep writing! Claire |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
I don't think that you have anything to hide I liked your poem, well done The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
I really like the style, us used here. Great poem. Parker |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
I can see that you're to the point huh??? You've stated your case well...with a powerful ending!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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