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wayoutwalt
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0 posted 2000-02-16 10:28 AM


The angels colored the view
Breathing it in seemed so perfect
Then a woman mixed with the hue
She was impossible to neglect

The scenery couldn't be beautifuller
That would not be a word
And it couldn't be more beautiful
That would be absurd

For the angels colored the view
The very view she was blocking
But what was a poor guy to do
She was taking off her stockings

That's all there is to the poem I really don't know what happened next sniff…




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hoot_owl_rn
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1 posted 2000-02-16 10:53 AM


ROFL....good one walt  
Nurse Crachet
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2 posted 2000-02-16 10:57 AM


Walt, I'm sorry we need to hear more...LOL

This is great!

Corinne
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3 posted 2000-02-16 11:00 AM


Women still wear stockings???

Yes, let's hear what comes next,Walt!

You have a dry wit, I can tell...

Corinne

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4 posted 2000-02-16 11:42 AM


She probably would knocka you out if she'd known you were watching! LOL. Or maybe she did? *G* I enjoyed this, Walt!!
devina
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5 posted 2000-02-16 12:17 PM


I think we're all requesting a sequel to this one Walt!!! hehe

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

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6 posted 2000-02-16 12:43 PM


You are a funny one, Walt! Thanks for the much needed laugh!!  

Denise

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7 posted 2000-02-16 02:26 PM


I love it! Great humor, two enthusiastic thumbs up!  

 "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

-Charles Brugnot


Martie
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8 posted 2000-02-16 05:42 PM


Beautifuller, is definately a word cause you just made it one and I like it.  Great poem!
Corazon
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9 posted 2000-02-16 06:01 PM


liked this....great poem!
wayoutwalt
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10 posted 2000-02-17 04:13 AM


okokokokokok i shall come up with a sequel but please dont expect an empire strikes back  or a second godfather it'll prolly be more like a meatballs 2...
Nan
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11 posted 2000-02-18 07:57 AM


*Tapping fingers & twiddling thumbs*.... not so patiently awaiting "Act Two"....
CMGrimm
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12 posted 2000-02-18 08:35 AM


LOL....that's great....

Chris


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13 posted 2000-02-28 10:08 AM


LOL, where is your mind Walt? Your silly side is something else.
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14 posted 2000-02-28 10:12 AM


Well I forgive you Walt.  If I was in your shoes, I'd probably stopped the poem there too.  LOL  


Michael


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