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spiked
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0 posted 02-15-2000 11:48 PM       View Profile for spiked   Email spiked   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for spiked

I talk
You appear to listen.
I confide in you my deepest needs
No response
I ask you a question
You nod
The question I asked didnít require a nod but an answer.
Was the question not clear?
What is it you fear?
Can my love be so wrong?
Do you not see itís this strong?
To entertain such coldness and yet still stand before you.
Look not at me but into your own
As what you need is not clear.
I have shown you what I need
Now you must show me.
If I knew I wouldnít be bewildered by the mere thought.
Each of us view from a different side of light.
In order for us to see things in the same light
We must share the image in our minds.
When combined the image can become one and then
We can share that which we have not.
Unobstructed, mutual love.
Having broken the binds that constricted it.
It can now blossom into what it was meant to be.
Each of us getting what we expected from it.
And growing together for things we have yet to expect.
Ecstasy, Pure ecstacy.

© Copyright 2000 Richard Rendall - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 02-16-2000 01:23 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

I really liked this; how it started out basically questioning whether the other party was even listening, and going on, cataloguing the false parts of relationships, all the way to the end, where it can only be assumed the narrator hasn't really felt this "pure ecstacy," because otherwise he wouldn't be romanticizing it as the be-all-end-all of everything. A lot said in this poem. Keep 'em comin'!

Mike
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2 posted 02-16-2000 02:08 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Rich, because that is what this is...thank you for adding beauty and interest into my life again.  This is incredible...

spiked
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3 posted 02-16-2000 05:04 PM       View Profile for spiked   Email spiked   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for spiked

Sometimes we see things through the eyes more clearly than our own.
This was written through the perception of sometime else.
Thanks
Rich
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4 posted 02-19-2000 01:06 AM       View Profile for spiked   Email spiked   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for spiked

Your Welcome
Serenity
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5 posted 02-19-2000 01:10 AM       View Profile for CMGrimm   Email CMGrimm   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CMGrimm

I like this one Rich...I like this one very much...How did I miss this one earlier?

At any rate...I am truly learning that I need to stop and look for you more often in here.

Thanks for an enjoyable read.

Chris

 Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.
 
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