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Let Me Go

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CMGrimm
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0 posted 02-15-2000 11:34 PM       View Profile for CMGrimm   Email CMGrimm   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for CMGrimm

Let Me Go


Let me go
Let me leave
Let me be
Let me breathe.

Let my fire
Burn your flesh
Let my taste
be on your breath.

Let me go
Let me leave
Let me be
Let me breathe.

Christopher M. Grimm



 Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.
© Copyright 2000 Christopher M. Grimm - All Rights Reserved
Nurse Crachet
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1 posted 02-16-2000 12:07 AM       View Profile for Nurse Crachet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nurse Crachet

I'll let you go
if you don't tell
them where I am.

Wow, this was intense
my heads still spinning
or was it that snake bite.
CMGrimm
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2 posted 02-16-2000 12:10 AM       View Profile for CMGrimm   Email CMGrimm   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CMGrimm

Adder girl.....
lol

Perhaps it was the snake bite.

Thanks for reading and commenting.

Chris.
bobbycat
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3 posted 02-16-2000 12:11 AM       View Profile for bobbycat   Email bobbycat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bobbycat

mmmm.....short, but to the point...sensual--loved that second verse.       Great job.     

Bobbycat =^..^=


 ~~Blessed Be!~~
Marge Tindal
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4 posted 02-16-2000 12:15 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Chris~
Two replies pop into my mind ....
the first is
NEVER
and
the other is
OXYGEN !
GET THE MAN SOME OXYGEN !

~*Marge*~


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Breathe~
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5 posted 02-16-2000 12:20 AM       View Profile for Breathe~   Email Breathe~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Breathe~

I'm here...you can all breathe now...*laughing at Marge*  

Chris...I'm kinda partial to this...Gee  I wonder why?... )

Simple yet powerful!  I love it...


 Freedom of expression is the watch word...

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6 posted 02-16-2000 01:21 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Short and simple and sensual and lots of other s words flying around. I enjoyed.

Mike
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7 posted 02-16-2000 08:20 AM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Chris, you've succeeded in saying so much with just a few simple (but extremely well~constructed) lines. I enjoyed this very much...nearly "too" much!  

Claire
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8 posted 02-16-2000 08:51 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

I like this one! Elegantly and simple... now breathe....
hoot_owl_rn
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Chris....you've managed to say a great deal with very few words....nicely done  
Marilyn
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10 posted 02-16-2000 11:15 AM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

I think I have a little different take on this poem then everyone else. I see your second stanza contradicting your other two. You want me to let you go, let you leave but you want me to do this with your taste and fire on my flesh? Hmmmm Me thinks not! lol.

Great writing.  
Corinne
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11 posted 02-16-2000 11:34 AM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Ahhhh yes, the push and pull of love!

Let met go, don't let me go!


Nice one, food for thought shall we say?

Corinne
CMGrimm
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12 posted 02-16-2000 11:30 PM       View Profile for CMGrimm   Email CMGrimm   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CMGrimm

HA HA HA....GREAT

Great responses everyone...I think Marilyn and Corinne really maybe capture the full gist of the poem.  Asking to be left alone, to leave and forget what they have left behind them yet not allow the other to forget about them.....sound familiar???


Thanks All.

Sorry to try and throw a curve...but I know you all will enjoy it.


Chris.



 Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.
January Flowers
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13 posted 02-16-2000 11:42 PM       View Profile for January Flowers   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for January Flowers

"let my taste
be on your breath"

Interesting.
Quick read,
Fun read,
Slow read,
"know" read.

Agree on the sensual thing-
very heated poem.
Betty Gravitt
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14 posted 02-17-2000 12:27 AM       View Profile for Betty Gravitt   Email Betty Gravitt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Betty Gravitt

CMGrimm... I can feel the plea in this. Very nice.

 B Gravitt

spiked
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15 posted 02-17-2000 12:31 AM       View Profile for spiked   Email spiked   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for spiked

Short strokes
Breathtaking
Great Poem
Rich
Beki
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16 posted 02-17-2000 04:47 AM       View Profile for Beki   Email Beki   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Beki

there is a very intense plea here....succinctly stated. good work.
CMGrimm
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17 posted 02-18-2000 09:34 AM       View Profile for CMGrimm   Email CMGrimm   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CMGrimm

Thanks JF, BG, Spiked and Beki....glad you all enjoyed it.

Chris

 Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.
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