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A way to fly

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Severn
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0 posted 02-15-2000 08:37 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Severn


I
storm-fraught
             defenseless

find that in a pace
I travel back
and gasp for breaths
already taken

A path
of wander peaceful
hides just around
a corner
passed before

and so I cry
                just fly

little child already grown
see this life
with feathered eyes

but wings are fallen things
and my words soundless
on the thermals
too high for reach
               and here I step

dragging lived time
into a now
I can't quite define

calling
          for my flight
in a silence still
of yesterday



 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath


[This message has been edited by Severn (edited 02-15-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Kamla Mahony - All Rights Reserved
Martie
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1 posted 02-15-2000 08:53 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Kamla, you have the most feathered eyes I have ever known...and you fly towards destiny.  Wonderful poem!

[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 02-15-2000).]
Marge Tindal
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2 posted 02-15-2000 09:01 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Kamla~
You just flit right to my heart.
I love this.  

'I travel back
and gasp for breaths
already taken'

Wow, gal !
So wonderful to see you here.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Skyfyre
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3 posted 02-15-2000 09:25 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

"But wings are fallen things"

What a deeply, exquisitely sad line, Kamla.  Well done on this bit of introspection and philosophy.

--Kess


 Full fathom five thy father lies,
Of his bones are coral made,
Those are pearls that were his eyes;
Nothing of him that doth fade
But doth suffer a sea-change
Into something rich and strange...


--William Shakespeare, from The Tempest

Breathe~
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4 posted 02-15-2000 09:29 PM       View Profile for Breathe~   Email Breathe~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Breathe~

A path
of wander peaceful
hides just around
a corner
passed before

I loved this...almost like cycles we can't seem to break out of...or missed moments..


Incredible!  Not even strong enough word to give this poem it's proper credit...



 Freedom of expression is the watch word...

Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 02-15-2000 09:32 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Severn,
A little peep into your deep.
Enjoyed the read *L* Sy
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6 posted 02-15-2000 09:34 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

This....and you...have been greatly missed. Don't leave the nest again!!!...(please?)

Your normal, standard exceptional writing  
hoot_owl_rn
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7 posted 02-15-2000 09:41 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Kamla....your presence has been sadly missed here....lovely words that soar like you  
Alwye
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In the space between moments


8 posted 02-15-2000 09:51 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Stunning...this is so packed full of emotion. Beautiful work!  

 *Krista Knutson*

One lives in the hope of becoming a memory.
~*Antonio Porchia*~
Corinne
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9 posted 02-15-2000 11:10 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

I love your writing style, Severn!

Corinne
Christopher
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10 posted 02-16-2000 01:30 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Away for a while, then back with a bang. Triumphant though subdued   return K.

"dragging lived time
into a now
I can't quite define"


Says it all!

Welcome back K.

 -*Hope the dream.
---*Wish the future.
------*Live the now.


Poertree
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11 posted 02-16-2000 05:45 AM       View Profile for Poertree   Email Poertree   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poertree

Gone from sight maybe K, but not for a moment from my heart ... freezingly beautiful

P
Dark Angel
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12 posted 02-16-2000 07:55 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Soul-Sister   you are truly amazing you know that!! This is Awesome, beautiful!!
                                                                                          
                   find that in a pace
                   I travel back
                   and gasp for breaths
                   already taken
                                                                    WOW!

Welcome back sweet butterfly, have missed you so much!!

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge




[This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 02-16-2000).]
poetFemmeFatale
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13 posted 02-16-2000 09:17 AM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

This is breathtaking girl...it has an "exhausted peace" about it.  I can certainly relate to that....Also glad to see you back - your writing shows you well.  Hope to see a little more now!  

 ** I'm reaching for the brightest star I've ever seen - knock my ladder out from under me, and you'll wish you hadn't !! -pFF ** Here's to 2000!
Denise
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14 posted 02-16-2000 12:27 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is wonderful, Kamla! Welcome back! I missed you!  

Denise
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on the threshold of a dream


15 posted 02-16-2000 12:43 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

This is wonderful! Every phrase is perfect!
Danny Holloway
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16 posted 02-16-2000 03:14 PM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

Some poetry stands out from the rest, poetry that speaks of where poets go, where many of us want to be, but not yet ready.  
You are there!!!
Danny
Michael
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17 posted 02-16-2000 07:14 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Wow is all I can say.  This pulls at all the emotion within me.  Very beautiful and desceptively sad.  I love the line,

"but wings are fallen things"

Wonderful work, Kamla.


Michael

HelmutB
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18 posted 02-16-2000 08:52 PM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

Seldom have I seen a poem like this
With words so beautiful bliss
Don't ever search the ground for a clue
Soaring through the Poetic sky that should be you
Thank you

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

Nan
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19 posted 02-17-2000 07:31 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

I sure am glad your vacation's over
This is simply wonderful!!..
Severn
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20 posted 02-17-2000 07:39 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Wow guys! Thanks for the welcome back!

Martie - thanks hon - you know you're the one with wings...

Marge(y) - it is just wonderful to be back...thanks my friend.  

Kess - why thankyou! It is a truth to me, that statement.

Breathe - yes, I think that is precisely what I was saying...thanks!  

Sy - and loves and hugs back to you...

'Deer - look, I WILL be staying quite firmly in that nest if you and the Vienna sausages are anywhere near my woods!   Thankyou Kind Sir.

Ruthy - missed you girl - hugs and thanks.

Alwye - thankyou!  

Corinne - it is entirely mutual!  

Chris - and what, pray tell, was the   for? Bah humbug to you!   Thanks, and not surprised you can identify with this.

P - such a freezing reply - thanks...Sir.

A of L - hey beautiful - I can just hear you say that!! Thanks dear...

Femme - nice to see you too...  

Denise you sweetie - hugs.

Suthern - wow! A perfect...LOL, not sure but your faith in my poem is so encouraging! Thankyou so much.

Danny - that is a truly beautiful thing to say. Thankyou.

Michael - thankyou my friend...sharing a sad smile with you.

Helmut - I have to say thankyou for that beautiful verse, wow, just lovely.  's.

Nan - ANOTHER  ! WHY??? Hehe - didn't entirely go away, just wasn't here...
Thanks.

K

 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath
mirjam
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21 posted 02-21-2000 02:08 AM       View Profile for mirjam   Email mirjam   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mirjam

Oh Kamla, your words are so haunting!

"gasp for breaths already taken" so often it feels like we're going round in circles, rehashing, facing our past over and over, and not moving forward. Kamla know that you WILL fly again, and you will fly high, and far, and forward, and into better days, new days, days filled with that peace you feel you have bypassed. Keep looking up Kamla, and keep writing!!! I have every bit of confidence in you my friend.  
mirjam
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22 posted 02-21-2000 02:11 AM       View Profile for mirjam   Email mirjam   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for mirjam

oh and i forgot to say that i really loved this! I guess it usually goes without saying, but it's nice to hear it eh?  



[This message has been edited by mirjam (edited 02-21-2000).]
HelmutB
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23 posted 02-21-2000 08:04 PM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

And a Happy Brithday too

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

 
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