How to Join Member's Area Private Library Search Today's Topics p Login
Main Forums Discussion Tech Talk Mature Content Archives
   Nav Win
 Archives
 Open Poetry #6 Archive
 Into My Pillow
 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17
Follow us on Facebook

 This is an Archive. You may post a reply, but new topics are not allowed.

 
User Options
Format for Better Printing EMail to a Friend Create a Greeting Card with this Poem
Admin Print Send ECard
Passions in Poetry

Into My Pillow

 Post A Reply   Go to the Next Oldest/Previous Topic Return to Topic Page Go to the Next Newest Topic 
CMGrimm
Senior Member
since 02-14-2000
Posts 700
USA


0 posted 02-15-2000 03:10 PM       View Profile for CMGrimm   Email CMGrimm   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for CMGrimm

Into My Pillow

Raindrops tap loudly on the rooftop
winds rattle my window panes
Lightening flashes across the sky
suddenly illuminating
thousands of sad memories
I hope to forget.

For a moment I thought I saw you
peering lovingly at me from the doorway,
but as the next bolt of lightening
re-illuminated the room
I realized I had imagined it
And then, there was only the rain
and the lonely desperate sounds of my weeping
With my face pressed hard
into my pillow.


Christopher M. Grimm



 
© Copyright 2000 Christopher M. Grimm - All Rights Reserved
CMGrimm
Senior Member
since 02-14-2000
Posts 700
USA


1 posted 02-15-2000 03:31 PM       View Profile for CMGrimm   Email CMGrimm   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CMGrimm

I'm not usually one to write sad or depressing words...but some circumstances and occasions do warrant an occasional tear of grief.  Sometimes I find that writing about things, whether something that happened in my life or in the life of a friend or even a casual acquaintance can sometimes help others to understand their grief, or maybe just help to realize we are all just human.   Anyway, enough rambling.  I hope you all enjoy.

Chris
infinat3 sadn3ss
Member
since 02-14-2000
Posts 86
somerset england


2 posted 02-15-2000 03:37 PM       View Profile for infinat3 sadn3ss   Email infinat3 sadn3ss   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for infinat3 sadn3ss

wonderful , i have been there before , keep at it even if you think that your poetry is rubbish because it is exelent
Meadowmuse
Member Elite
since 12-27-1999
Posts 3317


3 posted 02-15-2000 04:19 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Chris, you've brought this scene to life, and wonderfully so.

Claire
jascanvey
Member
since 12-26-1999
Posts 130
England


4 posted 02-15-2000 04:27 PM       View Profile for jascanvey   Email jascanvey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jascanvey

Chris, this is very sad. I must admit a thunderstorm makes me feel this way too. I loved the poem, thanks for sharing it.
Beki
Senior Member
since 09-15-99
Posts 1615
Newport Beach, CA, USA


5 posted 02-15-2000 04:42 PM       View Profile for Beki   Email Beki   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Beki

This is very touching Chris. I too have been there, and I think you've said it very well.

"Sometimes I find that writing about things, whether something that happened in my life or in the life of a friend or even a casual acquaintance can sometimes help others to understand their grief, or maybe just help to realize we are all just human. "

This is one of the greatest benefits of exercising our skills and talents as writers, it provides such an outlet for us. I will look forward to reading more of your work.  
Rosalind Palafox
Unregistered


Newport Beach, CA, USA


6 posted 02-15-2000 06:04 PM       Edit/Delete Message     View IP for Rosalind Palafox

*sobbing*It's okay. i've felt the pillow against my face so many times.

 "Love knows hidden paths."-German proverb
Marilyn
Member Elite
since 09-26-1999
Posts 2646
Ontario, Canada


7 posted 02-15-2000 06:35 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

This is the first of your work I have had the privalage of reading. It is very heart felt and I enjoyed it. Though pain is something we don't like to write about, it is a fact of life. Write it tends to purge the pain from our souls. It does not have to be a personal experience piece for us to elimate that pain we see around us everyday. Well written, I hope to read more of you in the future.
CMGrimm
Senior Member
since 02-14-2000
Posts 700
USA


8 posted 02-15-2000 10:57 PM       View Profile for CMGrimm   Email CMGrimm   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CMGrimm

Thanks everyone for the kind words.  This really means a lot to me.

Chris
Marge Tindal
Deputy Moderator 5 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Empyrean
since 11-06-1999
Posts 43042
Florida's Foreverly Shores


9 posted 02-15-2000 11:03 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Chris~
First of all, I like this.
Next ... could this be one of those
'Dedication' things ?  Yeah, I think so.

I felt the dampness on the pillow
as the 'outside' storm subsided.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com


hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 07-05-99
Posts 11105
Glen Hope, PA USA


10 posted 02-16-2000 11:05 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

wow, this is incredibly sad Chris....but none the less, well written
devina
Member Elite
since 10-28-1999
Posts 3189
Northern Cali


11 posted 02-16-2000 12:25 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

A very haunting poem indeed CM...Maybe that next bolt of lightning will bring her back to you!!!!!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
suthern
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Seraphic
since 07-29-99
Posts 20770
on the threshold of a dream


12 posted 02-16-2000 12:40 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Well done! *S*
Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 09-21-1999
Posts 28608
California


13 posted 02-16-2000 03:36 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Oh, the stories a pillow could tell.  Very sad and well written poem.
ill_tactics
Member
since 02-11-2000
Posts 148


14 posted 02-16-2000 04:43 PM       View Profile for ill_tactics   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ill_tactics

this is a nice poem, all the memories of the ones you love, seem to creep up on you.  I know that feeling, the smell of their cologne, or the image as you sit and think of them.  Very strong.  Keep up the words...Much love, One love, PEACE
CMGrimm
Senior Member
since 02-14-2000
Posts 700
USA


15 posted 02-16-2000 10:36 PM       View Profile for CMGrimm   Email CMGrimm   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CMGrimm

Thanks everyone for the kind words and praise.   Glad everyone enjoyed it.

Thanks

Chris
Breathe~
Member
since 02-05-2000
Posts 319
Washington...


16 posted 02-16-2000 10:42 PM       View Profile for Breathe~   Email Breathe~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Breathe~



I HATE pillows...darn tear stained fluffs!they're Evil things!

I guess I related to this more than I care to admit...

Extremely vivid..nice writing Chris...




 Freedom of expression is the watch word...

passing shadows
Member Empyrean
since 08-26-99
Posts 46297
displaced


17 posted 05-21-2004 03:34 AM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

this aches
CMGrimm will be notified of replies
 Post A Reply   Go to the Next Oldest/Previous Topic Return to Topic Page Go to the Next Newest Topic 
All times are ET (US) Top
  User Options
>> Archives >> Open Poetry #6 >> Into My Pillow Format for Better Printing EMail to a Friend Create a Greeting Card with this Poem
Print Send ECard

 

pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Today's Topics | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary



© Passions in Poetry and netpoets.com 1998-2013
All Poetry and Prose is copyrighted by the individual authors