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Biloxi Trilogy

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suthern
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0 posted 02-15-2000 02:00 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for suthern

These poems were not written together but they were written at the same place under the same circumstances... and thus are forever linked in my mind. *S* The first is semi-autobiographical.... the other two are observations. *S*


Biloxi Blues

I just want to go home
But I'll stay for a while
Hoping a stranger
Will see me and smile.
The house is so empty
Now that you're gone;
I don't think I can face
One more evening alone.
Loving another
Won't make everything right
Still I ache for someone
To hold me tonight.
All I need is a body
Someone's willing to share
To help me forget
You no longer care.


Bar Talk

If perhaps again we meet
Another time
Out on the street,
Forgive me please
If I pretend
I've never known you
As a friend.
For now, I'll share my hopes,
My shames
Tomorrow I'll not know your name.
It doesn't matter much tonight
The time is here
The moment's right
I feel my inhibitions flee
And I, at last,
Am somewhat free
To show me as I am to others
Who wear the dark's
Protective cover.
But morning brings
Reality
And shatters illusions
Carelessly.
To protect myself I must conceal
Relationships
That might reveal
The person I am here tonight -
It's not forgetfulness,
Just fright.


Hello, Again

Old lover, old flame
I don't even
Know your name.
Too many nights
With other faces
Have left only
Fleeting traces
Of your memory
Here with me
Tonight.
That's all right.
I doubt you remember me
Either.

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1 posted 02-15-2000 02:12 PM       View Profile for Wizzard   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wizzard

Suthern,
These are kinda sad but very well worded.
I Use to live in Biloxi as a kid and I went to Pass Road elem.
I hope that your able find your way home or find what it is that your heart is longing for.
Nice writings Suthern


 Today is the first day of the rest of my life.
And the begining of a new one.

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wow, when You decide to post, you really let us have it...these are excellent...just as you say....a slice in time....great work girl
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3 posted 02-15-2000 03:17 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Wow! But what else should I expect..

HUSG

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4 posted 02-15-2000 05:15 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Wizzard: Thank you! I never lived in Biloxi... but there was a time when I visited often. It's changed so much since the casinos have opened... my visits these days are solo and much more pleasant! *S*

Corazon and RG: Thank you both very much, dear ladies!!  
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5 posted 02-15-2000 05:17 PM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Wow, an impact felt far and wide with this/these. Been there done that as the saying goes. Nailed this you did Suthern!

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Very well done!  I like the way you formatted the place with 3 different times.
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7 posted 02-15-2000 08:06 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Excellent! To me, they work as one piece, only segregated - if you know what I mean. LOL!

K

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life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath
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8 posted 02-15-2000 08:20 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Suthern Gal~
These are three absolutely WONDERFUL pieces.
The intertwining of place and observant mood just adds to them.

I like all three VERY much.
Very much, indeed.
~*Marge*~


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Deep bows to you, Suthern. These are really wonderful...and the way you connect them together makes them more powerful yet. This is exceptional writing....give us more!!!!!
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Christopher: I once showed these to one of the people I'd been watching... when he told me I'd written his life, I knew I'd captured something... thanks for the affirmation. *G*

Marti, Severn, Marge, & Balladeer: Thank you so much for reading... and especially for your kind comments! *S*
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WOw...suthern, these three poems display the ability you have as a writer very vividly...nice work  
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woah woah woah i loved em i did!
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13 posted 02-16-2000 12:50 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

These are all wonderful, Suthern! You made me feel the emotions in them!

Denise
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14 posted 02-16-2000 02:44 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Thank you Hoot, Walt, and Denise!!! I'm very glad you liked them! *S*
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Belle!

OMG - So!  It was YOU who I saw with her top off dancing on the table that night!  I wondered who it was who spirited you out of that place.  I was hoping you could tell me, but I guess you can't   - lol.

These are terrific poems.  I especially liked the first one because it reads so well when done to blues beat.. duh duhduh duh dunh....
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16 posted 02-16-2000 04:29 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Thanks, sailor (nodding blonde head)... I'm just full of duh's! LOL.
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I never realized you led such a wild life.  You must be a real tiger when the blues hit.  lol
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Oh yeah..... Ain' single life just grand??

Hot dates whenever ya want 'em...  Whining, men, and song.... "It's Been a Hard Day's Night"....

hehe... Nice job here, suthern...
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Lady Suthern... I'd say these were a solid 16 bar riff of the blues. My compliments to you and yours.... And my I say, you seem a much happier person these days. Peace
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20 posted 02-18-2000 03:24 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

LJA: And even without the blues! *EG*

Nan: Yup... about as grand as having teeth pulled without anesthetic! LOL Thank you!

Andrew: Thank you... I am, indeed!!!! *S*
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Nicely done suthern....almost like you took a page from my life ...  (From a time long long ago though)LOL...
Anyway, beautiful poems all three.

Thanks for an enjoyable read.

Chris
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I was so glad to catch up with this one. Your talents pour forth on these well written poems
Liz
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Thank you, Chris!! *S* And Elizabeth, thank you for catching up... your kind words mean much to me!  
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Certainly a triology
Well done there

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

 
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