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Corazon
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0 posted 2000-02-15 10:37 AM


-one-
I miss you, yes,
my heart, the most, I think,
and you are still very much
inside my head
but my body has long since
made absent the ache and
refuses to be reminded
of the gentleness of your touch
your kisses so soft.
but how I miss the brown of
your deep eyes
and how I could see into more
than just today in your
your laugh and your smile…
but your hands,
your hands my love
will never be gone from me
I can close my eyes
and feel them still
your hands
loved me, even before
you said so with your eyes


-two-
inside the red inside my head
they overflow
the tears
and pour
down my shirt
filling the red
until open the window I must
or I will drown.
fresh air bathes relief
maybe in my missing you
I just forgot to
breathe.


-three-
you are gone
and I am left to make some sense of it
all
by myself
and so I put on knee pads
and rubber gloves and
meticulously
(irrationally)
wax the floors
as if it will bring you back


-four-
and if I sleep instead
of pacing with
the stars
as my company
will I miss you any less?
you are my quiet
the still place in my soul,
pace for pace
step by step
you softly numb my thoughts
until the tired makes
my feet stop
and so I ask
if I sleep
instead
will you be any less gone?



[This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 02-15-2000).]

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hoot_owl_rn
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1 posted 2000-02-15 10:55 AM


Such powerful words that speak more than what is written on the page. The pain, the longing, the loss is so evident here.
Wizzard
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2 posted 2000-02-15 10:58 AM


Corazon,
I can see that this person that you have written about has left a very deep impression in your heart.
I hope that your heart heal`s soon and your able to find another so that you can put away the glove`s and knee pad`s...Sorry..just trying to make ya smile
very nice Corazon
Thank`s for sharing.

 Today is the first day of the rest of my life.
And the begining of a new one.


suthern
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3 posted 2000-02-15 02:34 PM


These are wonderful... I especially identify with the last three... I just lack your energy! LOL

Yanno... if you run out of floors to wax, I have floors... dishes... yardwork.... even ovens to scrub! C'mon over!! LOL.

RainbowGirl
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4 posted 2000-02-15 03:20 PM


I have an even better idea, you two continue writing and I'll keep reading and we'll employ someone to wax the floors, save our poor aging knees..

HUSG

 Ouvrir mon coeur et âme

Corazon
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5 posted 2000-02-15 03:39 PM


hoot, thanks, yep anniversaries are hard...too many memories come piling in...

wizzard, thanks, and yes you did make me  

suthern, yep....missing you poems are universal I guess...and yep I was just thinking about packing my cleaning stuff to come and visit.....lolol....NOT!

rainbow...well if I had a preference, would rather write than wax lol....thanks   and hugs

suthern
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6 posted 2000-02-15 03:53 PM


Aw c'mon, Corazon..... I need you! LOL. For RG's idea has one major flaw... we have no money to hire help! LOL. (Well, actually two major flaws. *EG* MY knees aren't aging like some bony British ones I could mention. *EG*)
Corazon
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7 posted 2000-02-15 03:56 PM


hey I could send you both some knee pads??? *very helpfully putting all her pennies on the table to count them*
suthern
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8 posted 2000-02-15 04:38 PM


I'd much rather you use yours... no use in buying more... just bring your helpful self on over! *G* My plump knees and I will just watch your cleaning frenzy and enjoy the benefits! LOL.
jascanvey
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9 posted 2000-02-15 04:49 PM


Wow, these ARE powerful words.
You lot can clean, I'll make the coffee!!

Martie
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10 posted 2000-02-15 05:20 PM


You have expressed so well, this feeling, and made it so real, that I know.  I have had my days, not with waxing, but the vacuum cleaner.  I like the way you write!
Tara Simms
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11 posted 2000-02-15 06:54 PM


"your hands
loved me, even before
you said so with your eyes"--So beautifully put!

"maybe in my missing you I just forgot to breathe"--this one makes me melt.

I must say the last part was my favorite.  I love the image of the stars keeping you company as you pace the floors, missing your special someone.  "and so I ask if I sleep
instead will you be any less gone?" *Sigh*

You sure know how to turn a phrase.


 It matters not how strait the gate;
How charged with punishments the scroll;
I am the master of my fate:
I am the captain of my soul.
--W.E. Henley



freckles
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12 posted 2000-02-15 06:59 PM


WOW..........powerful words........nothing seems to make the person be "any less gone", eh?  There aren't enough floors to wax in this world to make that happen.  I look forward to reading more, Corazon.
Severn
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13 posted 2000-02-15 07:13 PM


Everyone else has said it already, but - Simply beautiful - and such loss.



 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath

Marge Tindal
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14 posted 2000-02-15 08:51 PM


Corazon~
I am impressed with this piece.
How beautifully done.

'maybe in my missing you
I just forgot to
breathe'

AWESOME !

Could we do ~Maids Are Us~ ?
Too much fun with this zany crew !
~*Marge*~




 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com



Breathe~
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15 posted 2000-02-15 09:16 PM


Gawd...this is incredible!  You are incredible!  *grin*

So simple ...yet so powerful...

I'm suddenly feeling small...*bowing at your feet*  I'm not worthy..I'm not worthy!!!  

Beautiful work Corazon!


 Freedom of expression is the watch word...


bsquirrel
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16 posted 2000-02-16 01:31 AM


Makes me wince, and understand. Very well done. Wow...

Mike

Corazon
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17 posted 2000-02-16 09:25 AM


thanks all, somehow your enjoyment makes the missing a little easier  
Martie
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18 posted 2000-02-21 09:38 PM


I have read this again and understand that you understand.
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