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here's to missing you, breathing and shiny floors

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Corazon
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0 posted 02-15-2000 10:37 AM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Corazon

-one-
I miss you, yes,
my heart, the most, I think,
and you are still very much
inside my head
but my body has long since
made absent the ache and
refuses to be reminded
of the gentleness of your touch
your kisses so soft.
but how I miss the brown of
your deep eyes
and how I could see into more
than just today in your
your laugh and your smile…
but your hands,
your hands my love
will never be gone from me
I can close my eyes
and feel them still
your hands
loved me, even before
you said so with your eyes


-two-
inside the red inside my head
they overflow
the tears
and pour
down my shirt
filling the red
until open the window I must
or I will drown.
fresh air bathes relief
maybe in my missing you
I just forgot to
breathe.


-three-
you are gone
and I am left to make some sense of it
all
by myself
and so I put on knee pads
and rubber gloves and
meticulously
(irrationally)
wax the floors
as if it will bring you back


-four-
and if I sleep instead
of pacing with
the stars
as my company
will I miss you any less?
you are my quiet
the still place in my soul,
pace for pace
step by step
you softly numb my thoughts
until the tired makes
my feet stop
and so I ask
if I sleep
instead
will you be any less gone?



[This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 02-15-2000).]
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hoot_owl_rn
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1 posted 02-15-2000 10:55 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Such powerful words that speak more than what is written on the page. The pain, the longing, the loss is so evident here.
Wizzard
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2 posted 02-15-2000 10:58 AM       View Profile for Wizzard   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wizzard

Corazon,
I can see that this person that you have written about has left a very deep impression in your heart.
I hope that your heart heal`s soon and your able to find another so that you can put away the glove`s and knee pad`s...Sorry..just trying to make ya smile
very nice Corazon
Thank`s for sharing.

 Today is the first day of the rest of my life.
And the begining of a new one.

suthern
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3 posted 02-15-2000 02:34 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

These are wonderful... I especially identify with the last three... I just lack your energy! LOL

Yanno... if you run out of floors to wax, I have floors... dishes... yardwork.... even ovens to scrub! C'mon over!! LOL.
RainbowGirl
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4 posted 02-15-2000 03:20 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

I have an even better idea, you two continue writing and I'll keep reading and we'll employ someone to wax the floors, save our poor aging knees..

HUSG

 Ouvrir mon coeur et âme
Corazon
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5 posted 02-15-2000 03:39 PM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

hoot, thanks, yep anniversaries are hard...too many memories come piling in...

wizzard, thanks, and yes you did make me  

suthern, yep....missing you poems are universal I guess...and yep I was just thinking about packing my cleaning stuff to come and visit.....lolol....NOT!

rainbow...well if I had a preference, would rather write than wax lol....thanks   and hugs
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6 posted 02-15-2000 03:53 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Aw c'mon, Corazon..... I need you! LOL. For RG's idea has one major flaw... we have no money to hire help! LOL. (Well, actually two major flaws. *EG* MY knees aren't aging like some bony British ones I could mention. *EG*)
Corazon
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7 posted 02-15-2000 03:56 PM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

hey I could send you both some knee pads??? *very helpfully putting all her pennies on the table to count them*
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8 posted 02-15-2000 04:38 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

I'd much rather you use yours... no use in buying more... just bring your helpful self on over! *G* My plump knees and I will just watch your cleaning frenzy and enjoy the benefits! LOL.
jascanvey
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9 posted 02-15-2000 04:49 PM       View Profile for jascanvey   Email jascanvey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jascanvey

Wow, these ARE powerful words.
You lot can clean, I'll make the coffee!!
Martie
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You have expressed so well, this feeling, and made it so real, that I know.  I have had my days, not with waxing, but the vacuum cleaner.  I like the way you write!
Tara Simms
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11 posted 02-15-2000 06:54 PM       View Profile for Tara Simms   Email Tara Simms   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Tara Simms's Home Page   View IP for Tara Simms

"your hands
loved me, even before
you said so with your eyes"--So beautifully put!

"maybe in my missing you I just forgot to breathe"--this one makes me melt.

I must say the last part was my favorite.  I love the image of the stars keeping you company as you pace the floors, missing your special someone.  "and so I ask if I sleep
instead will you be any less gone?" *Sigh*

You sure know how to turn a phrase.


 It matters not how strait the gate;
How charged with punishments the scroll;
I am the master of my fate:
I am the captain of my soul.
--W.E. Henley


freckles
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12 posted 02-15-2000 06:59 PM       View Profile for freckles   Email freckles   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for freckles

WOW..........powerful words........nothing seems to make the person be "any less gone", eh?  There aren't enough floors to wax in this world to make that happen.  I look forward to reading more, Corazon.
Severn
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13 posted 02-15-2000 07:13 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Everyone else has said it already, but - Simply beautiful - and such loss.



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life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath
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14 posted 02-15-2000 08:51 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Corazon~
I am impressed with this piece.
How beautifully done.

'maybe in my missing you
I just forgot to
breathe'

AWESOME !

Could we do ~Maids Are Us~ ?
Too much fun with this zany crew !
~*Marge*~




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Breathe~
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15 posted 02-15-2000 09:16 PM       View Profile for Breathe~   Email Breathe~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Breathe~

Gawd...this is incredible!  You are incredible!  *grin*

So simple ...yet so powerful...

I'm suddenly feeling small...*bowing at your feet*  I'm not worthy..I'm not worthy!!!  

Beautiful work Corazon!


 Freedom of expression is the watch word...

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16 posted 02-16-2000 01:31 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Makes me wince, and understand. Very well done. Wow...

Mike
Corazon
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17 posted 02-16-2000 09:25 AM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

thanks all, somehow your enjoyment makes the missing a little easier  
Martie
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18 posted 02-21-2000 09:38 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

I have read this again and understand that you understand.
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