IN my own HONEST opinion spiked....I think it is perfect. But that comes from the standpoint of READER. Only you as the poet know if the words say enough, (and believe me sometimes they just can't) Myself, I don't like to reveal to much to the reader, I like to make them think. Leave alittle to the imagination and not spoil the ending, with an ending...(does that make sense?)
Anyway, I really liked it, I thought it flowed very well from one stanza to the next. And I love leaving a little guesswork at the end. TO me...it's perfect.
Thanks for sharing