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bsquirrel
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0 posted 02-15-2000 01:36 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for bsquirrel

Here's a poem I wrote a while back, after my girlfriend of two years broke up with me. This was writing as catharsis: a lot of angry poems would come out later (and as you can see in -rain stones-, sometimes still do) but at this moment, I was projecting myself into the future, onto some ideal love someday. Haven't found her yet, but, then again, I'm not looking (for some reason).

Anyway, here ya go.

Mike

-a kiss (tears and sadness optional)-
Shhh. Hear that? That's my heart.
A gentle muscle pumping blood around my body.
I like it when we hold hands like this,
So the sun comes up between the web of the world's fingers.
I like starting each day with a new kiss, a new wish.
Mmm...your breath is so soft, sipping coffee smoking cigarettes.

I hold a book of poetry and read you a passage about love.
Poets will never understand how boring a subject that is.
I'll settle for the happiness and closeness of your touch.
The watchwords and hidden messages in your lips,
The way your eyes act like gentle diamonds reflecting the floating light.

I'll sit out here with you all day, until god closes one eye and opens the other,
Turns his head to watch us together.
I'll fall asleep with you asleep against me,
Your hair brushing my lips -- each strand a touch in the night.

Sleep well, my other. Sleep well and on into the day.

I whisper:
I will tell you everything you'll ever need with my kiss.
Brush the sunlight out of your hair, sink against me,
And let smoke waver from your lips.

You nod your head and close your eyes.
For now, we are here.

© Copyright 2000 MPC - All Rights Reserved
spiked
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1 posted 02-15-2000 01:46 AM       View Profile for spiked   Email spiked   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for spiked

very nice.
wonderful you can write so optimistically when in such despair. Great Poem

Rich
CMGrimm
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2 posted 02-15-2000 01:54 AM       View Profile for CMGrimm   Email CMGrimm   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CMGrimm

WOW!!!....I love it.   OUCH!!..my wife is slapping asking why I can't be so sweet.

HMMm...thanks alot.  HAHA.

THanks for sharing seriously.  I loved it.

Chris
devina
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3 posted 02-15-2000 02:59 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

This is full of great images Mike...I think you stopped my heart a couple of times along the way...I LOVE THIS!!! I'd surely swoon if a man gave me a poem as beautiful as this!!!! And don't worry about finding the right one...with passion such as lovely as you've written here, they're sure to be running!!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
Corazon
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4 posted 02-15-2000 06:04 PM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

yep this is the stuff dreams are made of, yep...sure is *nods her head like she has ever dreamed a dream like this before*....

great work...whew what a contrast to the stuff I read earlier....keep em coming  
Severn
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5 posted 02-15-2000 08:20 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Very nice indeed!



 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath
Alias
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6 posted 02-15-2000 10:35 PM       View Profile for Alias   Email Alias   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alias

great poem mike.

i just float away when i think thoughts like these.  

Marge Tindal
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7 posted 02-15-2000 10:45 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Mike~
Wow !
I like.

'I'll sit out here with you all day, until god closes one eye and opens the other'

What an image that is.
By the way ... when you aren't looking,
is just when love will find you.  
~*Marge*~


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Nurse Crachet
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8 posted 02-15-2000 10:54 PM       View Profile for Nurse Crachet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nurse Crachet

How about a dance in the Corner Pub before I'm wisked away
(they won't catch me this time)LOL

Nice poem, I bet when the feeling is right your words must really mesmorize ones senses.
bsquirrel
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9 posted 02-16-2000 01:00 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

spiked,
Glad you enjoyed it. The poem is both sweet and sour in my mind (more sweet, though).

CMGrimm,
But words, no matter how sweet, only get you so far, and I'm sure yr wife realizes that. Thanks for reading.

devina,
Thanks for feelin' it.   Believe me, no one's running.

Corazon,
Exactly; if I'm not careful with what poems I post, I'm going to blow people's heads up.  

Severn,
Merci.

Alias,
Do you float away like "gentle diamonds reflecting floating light," or however I worded it?  

Marge,
Thanks for reading, and liking! And c'mon, no hoary old chestnuts allowed for advice.   Maybe it's true for almost everybody. 2nd  

N.C., (rnc?)
There's some poems I will never post, though. In fact, those ones are destroyed.   Thanks for reading.

Mike
Nikkisweet
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10 posted 02-16-2000 01:35 AM       View Profile for Nikkisweet   Email Nikkisweet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nikkisweet

It's me again.
WOW!  What a poem.  Took my breath away.  You are a really good writer.  Wish I could write like that....
bsquirrel
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11 posted 02-16-2000 01:41 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Nah, be glad of how you write. I know I like it anyway. How it's simple, yet hides very complex feelings underneath. At least that's what I get out of your writing. I, on the other hand, sometimes get even more complex in my writing than my feelings. Oh well, it makes sense to me.

Mike
 
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