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Skyfyre
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0 posted 02-15-2000 12:16 AM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Skyfyre

Strip me of my
    skin,
What proud and practiced
Pretense I weave, so dear,
So worn to match my heart
    with being
        used,
That I have missed
    its beginning
                          and my end.

With hands,
        with wondering,
Explore the space beneath,
While eyes
   are held,
Examining the soul
   through panes of
      sylvan mosaic.

Do you see
A mirror of dreams?
        do you see as I do?
Do there flow
    rivers of doubt behind cerulean eyes,
Whose surface gleams
Candid, calm,
        do you see
    deadly camouflage, a siren's song
That lures the hapless?
Does there burn
Fiercely, a desire,
    a wanting beyond wanting,
                   as I
Need, at glance casual
Though perhaps
    dynamic, a flux
Between extremes,
    between yes and no.
                        do

You ever
    dream?


 Full fathom five thy father lies,
Of his bones are coral made,
Those are pearls that were his eyes;
Nothing of him that doth fade
But doth suffer a sea-change
Into something rich and strange...


--William Shakespeare, from The Tempest





[This message has been edited by Skyfyre (edited 02-16-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Linda Anderson - All Rights Reserved
spiked
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1 posted 02-15-2000 01:56 AM       View Profile for spiked   Email spiked   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for spiked

I love the poem Kinda makes me think of naked or exposed as it so revealing.
Rich
devina
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2 posted 02-15-2000 02:52 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

I think your last line says so much about this poem Kess..perhaps the title lies there??? (between you and me- I'd just call it poetic beauty!!!)

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
tracie66
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3 posted 02-15-2000 03:05 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

An inspirational poetic piece...I need say no more  Tracie
HelmutB
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4 posted 02-15-2000 04:54 AM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

Certain I am
The challange is clear
For me to title this
I fear
"Flux Dreams"
Perhaps
Still, a nice poem Kess

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

hoot_owl_rn
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5 posted 02-15-2000 09:16 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Perhaps "Mirrored Dreams"??
Nicely done regardless of the title...a rose by any other name still smells as sweet  
Christopher
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6 posted 02-15-2000 04:54 PM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

I very muchly like your ventures into the realm of free verse. For someone who claims not to write that "form" well, you rock at it! I'd like to point out, (because I'm a pain,) the places that I think could be improved upon... but you learn too darn quick and I see none here! I love as usual, your word usage and choice of imagers... Marvellous again m'friend...

If I were to pick a title, LOL, I think I'd call this Hall of Mirrors and Masques.
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7 posted 02-15-2000 07:08 PM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

No, make that Masques and Mirrors, I like that better!
Michael
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8 posted 02-15-2000 07:45 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Yes, I dream

I dream of walking naked
upon the shores of the soul,
unashamed in my offerings of love.

I dream of eyes looking upon me.
Eyes peering into the depths of my being.
Eyes that never turn away.

Hands of wondering
exploring me, searching me, needing me.

Yes, I dream
I dream awake as Time
steals prosaic life from me
within a shattered mirror
of would be truths
as I drown in rivers of doubt.
What image might the mirror hold
unbroken?

I have felt the siren,
I have loved her even
as her bloodthirsty lips
tore at my flesh,
longing to devour my soul,
and I have laid haplessly since,
pining in darkness
awaiting her return.

Yes, desire burns,
rages within
far beyond the realms of
understanding.
Far between the virtues
of yes and no!
And saddest of all,
only within
a dream.


Very inspiring piece, Kess.  I couldn't give adequate reply without taking it to verse.  I hope you don't mind.  I'm not sure what you could use for a title.  Chris's is very good.  From a simpler standpoint "Do You Dream?" might suffice.  I found myself wanting to scream, "Yes, I dream" after reading it....LOL  Truly, a great poem.


Michael



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Severn
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9 posted 02-15-2000 08:04 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Lovely, very well written. Oh - and I actually like 'Do you dream' for a title - it seems to sum up the whole piece and adds emphasis to the last lines.

K

 'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath
Skyfyre
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10 posted 02-15-2000 09:19 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

spiked (Rich):  Thank you, and it was intended to be so!  

devina:  poetic beauty?  I think you drank too much of that keg yesterday -- LOL!  

Tracie, Helmut:  Thanks and hugs to you both!

Ruth:  One of my favorite lines of Shakespeare!  What high compliments you bestow upon this humble soul ...  

Christopher (twice):  You and your Masques, here we go again!    

Thank you so much my friend, you know I value your opinion highly in any case, but especially in free verse (since you have such a particular talent for it yourself).  I am flattered to no end that you could find nothing here that begged improvement -- in fact, I'm approaching ecstatic!     For the record, I do enjoy writing free verse a great deal more than I used to, thanks to your patience with my flailing and foundering ... thank you!

Michael:  WOW!     That was wonderful, and a fitting "response" poem, though I am quite sure that I myself had absolutely nothing to do with your reply!    I am glad I was able to provide you with the inspiration to pen such lovely words -- may they be carried on gentle winds and fall softly on the ears of the one for whom they were intended ...  

Kamla:  I agree with you -- Christopher's Masques aside ( ), I would have to say that the poem was primarily about dreaming ...  

Smooches all, and thanks so much for the suggestions and replies ...

--Kess

Breathe~
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11 posted 02-15-2000 09:43 PM       View Profile for Breathe~   Email Breathe~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Breathe~

*light flickering softly from her lighter*

A bit cheesey I know...but I can not find anyway of better expressing how I felt reading this...

I agree with Severn...Do you dream?  That is fitting...



 Freedom of expression is the watch word...

Michael
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12 posted 02-15-2000 10:54 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Thanks, Kess,

My heart isn't easily swayed nor easily given.  Nor is where my heart lies a secret to anyone.  Even still, so much was said within your poem that it cried to my heart.  I only hope my reply falls upon the intended ears also.


Michael
Christopher
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13 posted 02-16-2000 01:31 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Mike's just a show off Kess, ignore him... I do!  

 -*Hope the dream.
---*Wish the future.
------*Live the now.


Danny Holloway
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14 posted 02-16-2000 05:03 PM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway


Always admire your writing, and with humble admiration, I submit the title:
            "Mosaic Dreams"
DH
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