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What They Seem...... For My Forum Friend

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Lucie
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0 posted 02-14-2000 10:53 PM       View Profile for Lucie   Email Lucie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Lucie

Somethings in life aren't always what they seem.
Sometimes we set our hopes for so much more.
We live our lives like some reoccuring dream.
Although, we’ve never lived our lives before.

Sometimes we set our hopes for so much more.
Just trying to find the place where we belong.
Although we’ve never lived our lives before.
No choice you make in life can count as wrong.

Just trying to find the place where we belong.
Sometimes we take a risk and grab a star.
No choice you make in life can count as wrong.
And where you are in life, is where you are.

Sometimes we take a risk and grab a star.
Yet when we look down all we hold is dust.
And where you are in life, is where you are.
And living out each moment is a must.

Yet when we look down all we hold is dust.
The star we grabbed is out of reach again.
And living out each moment is a must.
To know just where you are and where you’ve been.

The star we grabbed is out of reach again.
We live our lives like some reoccuring dream.
To know just where you are and where you’ve been.
Somethings in life aren't always what they seem.



 With perseverance even the snail reached the Ark.
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1 posted 02-14-2000 11:28 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Lucie~
This is just wonderful.
I love it when I can find
a poem within a poem.

The way you used the second line
of each stanza to start the next
is so refreshingly different.

You have done this soooooooo well.
It is lovely.
~*Marge*~





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Lucie
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2 posted 02-14-2000 11:41 PM       View Profile for Lucie   Email Lucie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lucie

It's called a Pantoum Marge.. It's really a neat way to write a poem.. you should try it.

 With perseverance even the snail reached the Ark.
devina
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3 posted 02-15-2000 04:01 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

No choice you make in life can count as wrong...this line grabbed me from my chair Miss Lucie...loved your style here...it's very effective!!!

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HelmutB
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4 posted 02-15-2000 04:48 AM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

Such nice poem and such nice style
Say you writting more and hang out with us for a while  
Thank you

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

Poet deVine
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5 posted 02-15-2000 08:00 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Well done! Pantoums are not that easy and you did a great job with this. It also has a good message!  
Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 02-15-2000 08:21 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Lucie,
I am impressed with your pantoum, You did a wonderful job and with a message. Well done.
Lucie
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7 posted 02-15-2000 08:42 AM       View Profile for Lucie   Email Lucie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lucie

Thank you all for your replies..

Helmut.. I'm gonna do my best to stick around for a bit.  
Marilyn
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8 posted 02-15-2000 12:51 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

Wonderful pantoum Lucie! Your words are so very true but it does not ease the pain of finding dust in your hands. *sigh*. Glad to see you around a bit more often.   I hope you can stay for a while!
poetFemmeFatale
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9 posted 02-15-2000 03:22 PM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

Lucie...this really touched me...thanks girl.  You always come through just when I think you've become extinct again...LOL.  You have some wonderful ideas pouring out from you - - I'm glad to see you're able to see blue skies now.  It won't be long now, before you see your man!  Alot of what you said in this beautiful poem really hit home for me.  Again, I thank you.  hehe  What'd you think I'd sound like on the phone??  ROFL  

 ** I'm reaching for the brightest star I've ever seen - knock my ladder out from under me, and you'll wish you hadn't !! -pFF ** Here's to 2000!
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10 posted 05-21-2004 03:44 AM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

well said!
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