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The Dance (from Open #2)

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Denise
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The gray plump granny smoothes her hair
And her pale pink cotton gown
And drifts away - to another day
....To another time and town.

How many years now has it been
How many tears ago
When her eyes fell first upon that lad
....Who had set her heart aglow?

She dabs the teardrops falling fast
And lays her glasses down
And travels there - to those days so fair
....In another time and town.

She now beholds that vision clear
A brilliant budding spring
With a promise of 'forevermore'
....And a glist'ning golden ring.

It's countless tears now since he's gone
Yet not a sun goes down
But she's proudly dancing with him there
....In her satin wedding gown.

Her lonely days...at last...are done
True...she leaves this land of care
And she runs to him and takes the hand
....Of her lad so debonair.

Now at last they are together
True...all trouble's now laid down
And now they're dancing there quite grandly
....In that grand 'forever town'.

Yes, together now...forever
True...they're walking hand in hand
And 'midst the angels they're still dancing
....In that grand 'forever land'.





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Eloise
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1 posted 02-14-2000 10:00 PM       View Profile for Eloise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Eloise

Oh Denise, this one is so beautiful.  Great imagery.  Thanks for reposting this one.  
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2 posted 02-15-2000 12:35 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Why, thank you Eloise! I'm glad that it touched someone!    
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Denise....this is breathtakingly beautiful Oh, such words about everlasting love. This one needs a boost back up my friend, it's too good to miss  
Meadowmuse
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Denise, I'm so glad I saw this! It's a beautiful poem, so sweet in sentiment and your rhyme and meter give it such a "feeling" of fluidity...just like their dance, one might imagine. So nice...

Claire
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Ohhhhh...so lovely, and tenderly sad.

Hey - missed ya!


K

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Denise, this is very, very ....oh, the words are always the same, wonderful, great...I wish I could find another better word.
Denise
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7 posted 02-15-2000 08:10 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Thank you, Ruth, Claire, Kamla and Martie for reading and commenting! I'm so glad that you enjoyed it!  

Denise

(I am still having intermittent 'puter problems and am having trouble reading and replying but I'll do so when I am able.   )
Corinne
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How beautiful!


Corinne
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Thank you, Corinne! I'm glad you thought it beautiful!  

Denise
 
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