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The Proposal

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CMGrimm
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The Proposal


A soft breeze gently rustles
the golden leaves that have fallen
scattered about,
below the twisted grey branches
of the tree
from which we used to swing.

Our names, carved by the hand
of this tenderhearted young boy,
still echo love,
of youth and of each other.

I now take your hand in mine,
and beneath the shadow of this tree,
a testament and reminder of our love,
I ask that we never allow it to fade
into the greyness of those limbs
or to dry and crumble like the leaves
that have fallen to the ground.

But that we allow it to grow
ever upward, and to be strong,
as the trunk of the great tree itself
that bears the evidence of this great love,
which beneath it's arms began.


Christopher M. Grimm




 
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Yearning and nostalgic, a beautiful Valentine
that bespeaks a sensitive heart.
Meadowmuse
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Chris, this is lovely and full of devotion. I enjoyed the image and idea of the great tree promoting, confirming and protecting your love's commitment. Wonderful!

Claire
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3 posted 02-15-2000 01:01 AM       View Profile for CMGrimm   Email CMGrimm   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CMGrimm

Thank you very much Serenity and Meadowmuse.
This particular piece was written not long after proposing to my wife.  It really means alot to me and is probably one of my favorites for reading and displaying.  I appreciate the comments deeply and hope to be able to bring to each of you a deeper understanding of myself and my writing through this and other poetry to be posted.

Thank You
Chris
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Chris this makes me think forward into time where the tree you speak of has grown but the initials are still there as this love you speak of is. lasting many year through it's pure devotion
Great read.
Rich
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5 posted 02-15-2000 01:24 AM       View Profile for CMGrimm   Email CMGrimm   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CMGrimm

Thanks spiked.  it's nice to come on-line and share my writing with people who can read and understand what I am trying to say.  So much great poetry (not to say that mine is) is lost today because so few try to look deep into themselves and find what the words mean to them instead of trying to figure out what they meant to the author.

Thank You
Chris
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How did you say
A piece is only poerty if feelings are awaken within the readers heart
Well yes I say you's is truly poetry
And with such charm and softspoken art
Beautiful

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

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CM~
How likened to the mighty oak is love.
This is beautifully grown.
~*Marge*~


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hoot_owl_rn
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APPLAUDING!!! Wonderful work with this one Chris...I could see every bit of it. Nicely done  
CMGrimm
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9 posted 02-15-2000 11:19 AM       View Profile for CMGrimm   Email CMGrimm   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CMGrimm

Thanks Helmut, hoot, and Marge for your too kind words.  You have really set the standard for the rest of my day. haha. I hope the rest can keep up.
Anyway, thanks

Chris

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