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dash rendor
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since 2000-01-30
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0 posted 2000-02-14 04:28 AM


Gentle rocking
A sloshing sound
Softly drips
Far away splash
Quiet wind whistles
The sounds inside
My lonely heart
Soothing but sad
Free and restricted
Gentle yet raging
Bonds of loneliness
Bonds for love
Empty hearts
Will float forever
On a sea of tears
Crying for love

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Denise
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1 posted 2000-02-14 09:53 AM


Welcome to Passions, Dash! This is so sad yet so beautiful! Please check your email for a special welcome!

Denise

Marina
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since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245
Pickering, Ontario
2 posted 2000-02-14 06:59 PM


I really like the flow you have going here.  The message is clear and descriptive.

Marina

Ted Reynolds
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since 1999-12-15
Posts 331

3 posted 2000-02-15 07:55 AM


Your use of "s"s greatly increases the effect of this when read aloud.
hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
4 posted 2000-02-15 11:52 AM


Very nicely done ....welcome to passions  
CMGrimm
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since 2000-02-14
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USA
5 posted 2000-02-15 11:59 AM


Nice one Dash.  I'll be looking forward to see more from you.  Welcome to passions.

Chris

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