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Wealth

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christies heart
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Like a spiral it spins forever.
We never quite know where it ends.
It dances with shame, it's painted with hope.
It toys with humanity, never making ammends.

Like a dragon it breaths down our backs
as we stand on the shore of this age.
Beyond the horizen, the gold must be won,
while we trample on truth with sunbeams of rage.

So when will we learn to wade through grey
On the pages of novels where our end never rhymes?
When will wealth mean feet in warm sand
running though castles of angel designs?


Christie R

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A poem like this one - exuding such wonderful imagery from every portentous line.... with a archetypal message such as this is definitely coming back for more...
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This fairly sings! Lovely poem with beautiful imagery! I would love to see those castles of angels designs!    
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Thanks for the comments. It's always so hard for me to share poetry. Any feedback helps me be motivated to actually allow myself to put this stuff anywhere other than fast food napkins.  
Mistikman
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As PdV and Nan have said before me, wonderful poem and great use of imagery   Keep up the good work.

 I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion

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Christie's Heart-
Well, this is a diner of sorts.
We have a full menu of poetry.
Yours is definitely better than
written on a fast-food napkin.
Beautifully laden with imagery
of barefoot toes in sand.
A wealth of immense measure.
Thank you for sharing it with us.
~*Marge*~


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