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Dragon's Awakening

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White Wolf
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Somewhere in the vast wastelan


0 posted 02-13-2000 05:36 AM       View Profile for White Wolf   Email White Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for White Wolf

Always keeping their distance
Never taking the time to talk
I used to think there was something wrong
Not once did I ever suspect

Why wouldn't anyone befriend me
What reason had they
When would I know
No one ever told me

Then there was you
Picked me up out of loneliness
Showed what love was
What a friend was

Fragrance of a rose
Beauty of twilight
Affection of a kitten
Our love flurished

Whispers in the wind
Melodies of the heart
Crashing of waves
Memories that keep us strong

Teaching me that there is more to life
Silence, not knowing what to say
Closeness, there is nothing more beautiful
People fear what they cannot understand

You are a dragon
Power beyond comprehension
Charm that melts any wall
Fire that cause things to get crispy(had to include that one)

And with that she left my life
Left me understanding love
My sweet little angel
If only she would be my wife


Just thought I would write this one.  I tried some different things in this one.  I am experimenting to see what ways I like to write.    


 If dying is the process of living life to its end.
Then what is living?





[This message has been edited by Scorched Dragon (edited 02-13-2000).]
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JamesMichael
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1 posted 02-13-2000 07:33 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Since you are trying different things how about titleing this poem as "poetry experimentation" or "experiments in poetry".  Just a suggestion.  James
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2 posted 02-13-2000 09:27 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

I like your poem. I probably would call it "Awakening Dragon"....or "Dragon's Awakening"...
Marge Tindal
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3 posted 02-13-2000 12:01 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Scorched Dragon-
I would call it 'Fragrance Of A Rose'
for though she may be gone ...
her fragrance lingers.

Nice job.
~*Marge*~


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Breathe~
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4 posted 02-13-2000 12:11 PM       View Profile for Breathe~   Email Breathe~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Breathe~

Ooooh...I like Marge's suggestion... )

I think this is lovely!  You experiment well!   )


 Freedom of expression is the watch word...

White Wolf
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5 posted 02-13-2000 08:27 PM       View Profile for White Wolf   Email White Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for White Wolf

jmlee12345- I appreciate the suggestion.

Poet deVine-  You always seem to have the ability to come up with something good when I could only come up with nothing.

Marge-  I love that title but I have an idea for a poem that that title will fit much better.  Thanks for the suggestion.

Breathe-  I am glad you liked the poem and please refer to my response to Marge.

I thank you all for your comments and suggestions.  They have all helped me.  


 If dying is the process of living life to its end.
Then what is living?

Justbleu
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6 posted 06-20-2000 07:55 AM       View Profile for Justbleu   Email Justbleu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Justbleu's Home Page   View IP for Justbleu

Interesting!!! Nice!! Seems to be a common thread in your poetry!!

"Creation of woman from the rib of Man: She was not made from his head to top him; nor out of his feet to be trampled upon by him; but out of his side
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