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Tea Time

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0 posted 02-12-2000 09:58 PM       View Profile for christies heart   Email christies heart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for christies heart

Pride,resentment,and anger sat down for tea
Anger said "Pride, I am glad you were free".

Pride smiled with hope then looked away
"what do you think of me anyway?"

"How could you ask that?" anger exlaimed.
Pride still wouldn't looked, but somehow felt shamed.

"Oh, your too good, too good for me" anger's emotion now totally free.

Pride stood up said "have a good one",
leaving anger with resentment until tea was done.
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Christie,
I love third personas and imagery. I think you should have taken this one and run with it.

 
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Lucky, thanks. Funny you should say that. I wrote this waiting for the water to boil. Later I thought that it may be fun to take it further. I may try again someday (like when I am baking some bread)...
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I think you've got a neat concept and a good beginning here.  Try working on it more while the bread's baking, you need at least that long to knead this into shape.  It will be worth it, I think.
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Christie-
This is just wonderful.
It says so much about the
liasion of the three.
'Pride goeth before the fall'
of anger and resentment.

Put the tea kettle on gal.
This one is simmering !
Can smell that bread baking !
~*Marge*~




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