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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2000-02-12 05:30 AM


I do not love you anymore.
I do not love you any less.
In fact, I wish you all the best.

Whatever it is
you've felt denied
I hope you find it--
multiplied.

I'll find it for you
if I can--
I'll help you,
because I understand.

I know I've not been here for you.
I know that you have feelings too.
(At least, I like to think you do...)

     And O my children,
     please don't ask,
     I never give directions...
     All I know is where I've been,
     never knowing where I stand...
     With that in mind,
     should blind lead blind,
     I'll offer then, suggestions....

I do not have it all together.
My heart is soft, not hewn of leather...
All I've ever known is US--
together.
And it's been bad
and sometimes great
but something's there--
we hesitate--
it makes us wish for something far...
and that's what makes it so damned hard.

Medicine?
I think too late.
The opposite of love?
Not hate.
The malady we have is this:
love's opposite--
indifference.

© Copyright 2000 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
Rex Allen McCoy
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Sippin a Timmy's in London
1 posted 2000-02-12 10:03 AM


Excellent poem ... and very true
some people still fool themselves into
thinking that the opposite is hate ... simply because they summarize their mixed emotions at the wrong time and lable love with a bad experience

Rex}<{{{{o>

Poet deVine
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2 posted 2000-02-12 11:48 AM


Very good! I like the format you used also..  

Tasi
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3 posted 2000-02-12 11:53 AM


Excellent way to sum it all up.
Tasi

Marge Tindal
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4 posted 2000-02-12 12:17 PM


Serenity-
Feelings spread all over the page.
I like the way you formatted this.
Brings attention to your thoughts.
I pray I never have to look
indifference in the eyes.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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serenity blaze
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5 posted 2000-02-12 09:15 PM


Rex Allen--you have my eternal gratitude for
           all of the support you have given
           me during some especially trying
           times.

Poet deVine--your encouragement means so
           much to me, thank you.

Tasi--     thanks to you also for your
           kindness.

Marge--    How I wish we could get together
           over coffee...you are a very wise
           woman and I am always thrilled to
           receive a reply from you.

Thanks to everyone at Passions.  I so much want to become a better writer because of you
all.  Angels--that is what you are.

Nan
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6 posted 2000-02-13 01:48 PM


You're so very right... I see serenity in your words...
freckles
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since 2000-02-12
Posts 160
Virginia USA
7 posted 2000-02-13 01:56 PM


I enjoyed your poem.  The truth is sometimes hard to digest, but that's what beats in the heart of your poem.  I hope to read more of your work in the future.
spiked
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since 2000-01-13
Posts 873
Hammond, La USA
8 posted 2000-02-14 12:32 PM


Indifference comes in many disguises.
The ability to know it is the true talent.
Hoping you never have to test your talents.

Rich

By the way great poem!

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